Talk:Alban people

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I add my support to splitting the article into sections. A couple possibilities may include: perceptions of Alba Longa, Origin of the Albani, etc. Next, I was a bit confused by all the bolded words - where they meant to be links to other articles? It may be useful to look those up on Wikipedia and see if there are articles related to them. Lots of detailed information here - a table of contents and section division lines (see code for other articles) may be very useful. Good luck! - Eugenia Gabrielov 129.105.4.184 15:50, 15 May 2007 (UTC)

I have two main comments. First, I would consider splitting this article in sections. For instance, a specific section for geography would make it easy for reader interested in the location of Alba Longa to find the relevant information.

Second, most of this aricle appears to be focused on Alba Longa. While the information is really more about the activities of the Albani while at Alba Longa, my first impression was that I was reading an aricle on Alba Longa. The information here doesn't seem to be reflected in the Alba Longa article, so you might consider rephrasing the information to focus more on the role of the Albani as a people and less on the city in which their actions took place. This is just personal preference though - it might be awkward to phrase it differently.

Regarding content, I'd like to see more discussion about what information, in the eyes of modern historians, is considered to be fact and what is considered to be legend. For instance, Livy is a wonderful source but even he awknowledges in his first book that some of what he says is more likely legend than fact. In a couple of instances he even gives two version of the story - one legend and one which he believes to be more likely true. Modern historians will count even more of it as legend.

You're second paragraph in some ways covers this (the legend of Aeneas vs. archaeological evidence of the location). But you don't cover (if they exist) archaeological views of the founding date or the origins of the people. (Unless evidence corroborates the Aeneid).

DavidBild 02:28, 15 May 2007 (UTC)

I agree with David that the article would be clearer if there were distinct sections which seperated the topics. I found it easy to get lost while reading because each paragraph covered a completely different subject about the Albani people. Maybe if you created a header for each paragraph and expand the intro sentences, it would make the article easier to understand.

In terms of content, I would've liked to read more about the city's hegemonic role as the head of the league of city-states: how do the sources vary and why? Also, more information about the city's eventually destruction and the war the led to it would have been interesting. As a minor sidenote, I would've liked if there was a numerical distance mentioned concerning the location of the city relative to Rome, because I wasn't sure where any of the geographical locations cited where. Other than that, I found the article really interesting.

Stephanie Sutter 11:18pm, 14 May 2007

I agree with the other comments about splitting the article into sections. It's somewhat difficult to follow. The actual information contained within the article is good though. I don't think that the title for the References section is correctly formatted and a lot of your references seem to be repeated. Perhaps you should include a map that contains the location of Alba Longa.Asaunders906 16:47, 15 May 2007 (UTC)Alexandra Saunders

Great information, good job on following your editors' many helpful comments. There is more information on Alba Longa than the Albani, but that's largely a matter of the sources. Anisekstrong 01:57, 1 June 2007 (UTC)Anise K. Strong