Talk:Albania in the Eurovision Song Contest 2019/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:42, 4 January 2021 (UTC)

This is the first time of mine reviewing a Eurovision Song Contest article, but I have similar experience in reviewing songs relevant to Eurovision and concert articles, so hopefully this will go well! --K. Peake 07:42, 4 January 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Final result is not mentioned or sourced anywhere; anything written in the lead needs to be sourced in the body
 * Target to RTSH to Radio Televizioni Shqiptar
 * Mention the song's music video at the end of the first para since that is notable promotion for the lead

Background

 * Wikilink Eurovision Song Contest
 * "Its highest placing in" → "The country's highest placing in"
 * "which the nation achieved" → "which it achieved"
 * "its first entry was" → "the first entry was"
 * "seven times with both" → "seven times, with both"
 * "finishing in eleventh place" → "finishing in 11th place" per MOS:NUM

Festivali i Këngës

 * "It consisted of two semi-finals on 20 and 21 December," → "The competition consisted of two semi-finals on 20 and 21 December, respectively,"
 * "confirmed its participation" → "confirmed the nation's participation" to be specific since otherwise it sounds like the broadcaster confirmed its participation
 * "for artists and composers" → "for creators and performers" since that is what the source actually says
 * "on 17 October 2018 shortlisted" → "on 17 October 2018, being shortlisted"

Competing entries

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * Lyricist(s) → Lyricist, as there are no songs listed with more than one lyricist unlike there is for composers

Semi-finals

 * "The semi-finals took place" → "The semi-finals of the Eurovision Song Contest 2019 took place"
 * "at 20:45 (CET), respectively." → "at 20:45 (CET) on the respective dates." with the target, because "respectively" is not appropriate here when there is only one time mentioned, despite the two separate days
 * Target first semi-final to Eurovision Song Contest 2019
 * "was closed by the Italy's Eurovision Song Contest 2018" → "was closed by Italy's Eurovision Song Contest 2018"
 * "In the first semi-final, the competing artists" → "In it, the competing artists" to avoid overstating the title
 * Target second semi-final to Eurovision Song Contest 2019
 * "the twenty-two acts performed the final version" → "the 22 acts delivered performances of the final versions"
 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION for both the tables
 * Why do the tables not have the appropriate source(s) accompanying them?

Final

 * "The grand final took place" → "The grand final of the Eurovision Song Contest 2019 took place"
 * Remove target on CET
 * "On the same day prior to" → "On the same day, prior to" since this is more specific and otherwise, it may read as if you mean the same day that proceeded the show
 * "fourteen songs competed" → "14 songs competed"
 * "Pali Kuke, Rona Nishliu," → "Pali Kuke, Nishliu,"
 * "announced as the country's representative for the Eurovision Song Contest." → "announced as Albania's representative for the 2019 Eurovision Song Contest."
 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Promotion

 * "An accompanying music video for" → "A music video for"
 * "on the official YouTube channel of the Eurovision Song Contest" → "via the Eurovision Song Contest's official YouTube channel"
 * "Apart from the music video, Jonida Maliqi travelled" → "Outside of the music video, Maliqi travelled"
 * "in 1950s sytle clothing" → "in 1950s style clothing"
 * "She is subsequently joined" → "Maliqi is subsequently joined"
 * Target choreography to Choreography (dance)
 * "For promotional purposes, the singer" → "For further promotion, the singer"

At Eurovision

 * Remove wikilink on Eurovision Song Contest 2019
 * "at the Expo Tel Aviv in" → "at Expo Tel Aviv in"
 * "on 14 and 16 May," → "on the respective dates of 14 and 16 May,"
 * Change Big 5 to Big Five with the target per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "each participating country," → "all participating countries,"
 * "although, the top ten countries" → "although the top 10 countries"
 * "put into the same pot." → "being put into the same pot."
 * "which placed each country" → "that placed each country"
 * "so that similar songs were not placed" → "for preventing similar songs being placed"
 * "each other, Albania" → "each other; Albania"
 * "perform in position fourteen." → "perform in position 14."
 * The last sentence of this para is completely unsourced; fix this
 * "In the second semi-final, Albania performed fourteenth" → "In the second semi-final of the Eurovision Song Contest 2019, Albania performed 14th"
 * "a total of 96 points:" → "a total of 96 points;"
 * "one from their professional jury and the other from televoting." are you sure this is the correct wording to specify what the source says?
 * "with their names published" → "with their names being published"

Points awarded to Albania

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION for both the tables
 * Why do the tables not have the appropriate source(s) accompanying them?

Points awarded by Albania

 * Same comments as the above two

Split voting results

 * Members list looks good
 * Same comments as before for the tables

Final comments and verdict

 * for a week; although this article has a considerable amount of issues, it looks a lot better from when the previous review was undertaken! --K. Peake 11:07, 4 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Hello I responded to your comments and done everything mentioned above. Thank you for the review.--Lorik17 (talk) 14:46, 4 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Did some slight copy editing of the lead after you mentioned the music video and live performances but other than that, this article is ready to go. ✅ after a very quick response from you, only hours after my review! --K. Peake 15:59, 4 January 2021 (UTC)
 * That's great, thank you again. Best greetings--Lorik17 (talk) 16:09, 4 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Best of greetings to you as well and it is great how you kept giving thanks for all of my edits; I may review your other Eurovision Song Contest GAN sometime soon actually! --K. Peake 16:24, 4 January 2021 (UTC)
 * I really appreciate your work and of course that would be super amazing if you could review other Eurovision articles as well. I'm also planning to work extensively on more articles to get a GA status, after my exams for uni of course. And yeah thanks again and good health for you and your family for the new year :)--Lorik17 (talk) 18:21, 4 January 2021 (UTC)