Talk:Albert Downing/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: ProKro (talk · contribs) 16:19, 22 July 2015 (UTC)

Lead

 * "team mate" – "teammate" or "team-mate"
 * Done. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:08, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

Early life

 * "Later he was working as a storeman for the Ellison and Duncan Company." – "He later worked..." or "Later, he worked..." (Simple past instead of past continuous.)
 * Done. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:08, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

Military career

 * "On 13 June he departed bound..." – "On 13 June, he departed bound..." (Comma)
 * Done. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:08, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

Review

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

Article is concise and focused with only a few minor spelling and/or syntactic errors. Text is easy to read, it is interesting and engaging.
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * All concerns addressed. ✅
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * References are few but reliable and verifiable. ✅
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Neutral ✅
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * There are no copyvios or other issues. ✅
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Copyvio
One minor instance (detector); the following will need to be rephrased:
 * "being joined by five eighths Jock McKenzie, who had transferred from Wellington, and Jack O’Brien, a fullback who was a club foundation member." (close paraphrasing and/or duplicated)
 * Re-edited the sentence. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:08, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

Additional comments

 * The article uses chiefly British/New Zealand English spelling, especially in news articles quotes, e.g. splendidly and vigour, so I'd suggest putting the New Zealand English tag in the article's talk page as a reminder for future editors.
 * Tagged with . FunkyCanute (talk) 13:08, 27 July 2015 (UTC)


 * There are few sources, aside from Papers Past, so I'd suggest archiving those recent news articles to prevent link rot.
 * OK. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:08, 27 July 2015 (UTC)


 * Regarding dates, I'd suggest changing every date without the year indicated, to a mm/dd format (January 1,...), instead of dd/mm (1 January,...). This is more of a stylistic suggestion than anything else, really, as it is more prevalent on the majority of articles. This goes for all three articles.
 * If you don't mind, I'd like to keep the British English date format. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:08, 27 July 2015 (UTC)
 * By all means, but keep in mind that some users might feel inclined to change it in the future. You might want to put in a heads-up for any future editors who might see it as a typo. Something like, "<! --This article uses British date format. Please, do not change it. -->", will work. ProKro (talk) 00:17, 28 July 2015 (UTC)

That's about it – an easy pass, in my opinion. As soon as the issues are addressed, the article'll be good-to-go. If you have any questions, feel free to ask. ProKro (talk) 22:15, 25 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Thank you for this one too! FunkyCanute (talk) 13:08, 27 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Congratulations! Pass ProKro (talk) 00:17, 28 July 2015 (UTC)