Talk:Albertine Winner/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: CaroleHenson (talk · contribs) 04:34, 28 February 2020 (UTC)

General comment
Hello, this looks like an interesting article and I look forward to reviewing it. My MO is to read the article, list any issues or questions in sections by article sections, and then add a table of GA criteria and go through those items. I am detail-oriented, as a heads up. Please feel free to express your thoughts as well.–CaroleHenson (talk) 04:38, 28 February 2020 (UTC)
 * The article is well written - great job! My comments are mostly nitpicky details and perhaps American vs. British English issues. Please inform me if my comments fall into that category.–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:27, 28 February 2020 (UTC)

Intro and infobox

 * Infobox: The comma is not needed in "Physician, and administrator", right? ✅
 * Infobox: Please capitalise first in "first deputy chief medical officer" ✅
 * Intro: It would be nice if the intro included more of her accomplishments, like receiving OBE in 1945, etc. - I added the DBE.–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:11, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Intro: The sentence about her death is kind of hanging out on it's own and is not really needed. If you want to keep it, can you roll it up to the previous paragraph, so that it is not an orphan?–CaroleHenson (talk) 04:49, 28 February 2020 (UTC) ✅ by me.–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:03, 1 March 2020 (UTC)

Early life and education

 * Please spell out honours degree and link to honours degree✅
 * I am not sure if it's an American English vs. British English thing, but I would use "a" vs. "the" in: "the Bachelor of Medicine, Bachelor of Surgery degree as well as the University of London Gold Medal"✅
 * What do you think about moving "She also played for the university's tennis team." before the 1933 graduation information. (That way, it flows a little more smoothly to "Winner followed this with an MD in 1934.[4]" from the Bachelor's degree.–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:02, 28 February 2020 (UTC)✅–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:05, 1 March 2020 (UTC)

Career

 * Is there any information about why she received the OBE in 1945 (i.e., super impressive, I am guessing that there is an interesting story.)?
 * I looked, but couldn't find anything.–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:18, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Same question re: becoming a honorary physician to the Queen
 * I looked, but couldn't find anything.–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:18, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Any info on how she became a Dame Commander of the Order of the British Empire?
 * I looked, but couldn't find anything.–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:18, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * General comment: She sounds like she was likely a very impressive woman, who accomplished a lot of goals, etc. Are you interested in expanding the information about her career to provide more details?–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:24, 28 February 2020 (UTC)

Retirement and the hospice movement

 * It seems as if this should be rolled up into the Career section, or perhaps a "Later years" section, since she had weighty roles for a number of years after her intended retirement.
 * Do you know how long she was president of the "Medical Women's Federation"?–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:24, 28 February 2020 (UTC)
 * I looked by couldn't find that info.–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:30, 1 March 2020 (UTC)

Personal life

 * There is no information about her personal life, so I am guessing she never married. It would be interesting to know something about her personal life. It is not necessary, though.–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:24, 28 February 2020 (UTC)
 * I found some info, like that she was an art collector, etc. I also found a nice quote about her in the BMJ obituary. It might be nice to have, but not necessary.–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:31, 1 March 2020 (UTC)

Research
I would be happy to do some research on her personal life and career to help fill out those sections/topics, if that works for you.–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:24, 28 February 2020 (UTC)