Talk:Alec Bohm/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 15:02, 8 July 2021 (UTC)

Shall review for the July 2021 GAN Backlog Drive MWright96 (talk) 15:02, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "where he led the state of Nebraska in batting average his senior year." - batting average during his senior year.
 * "and accepted a scholarship offer to play for Wichita State." - clarify it was college baseball and that it was the shockers at the end of the name of the college

Early life

 * Bohm's birth date is missing from this section and verify it with a reliable source
 * "In the summer of 2015," - try avoiding using seasons per MOS:SEASON

College career

 * "hitting a home run in his first at-bat with the Shockers." - LIMITED violation here
 * "He led the American Athletic Conference in runs scored (57) and home runs." - how many home runs did Bohm score in that season?
 * Wikilink the term double to the relevant article only on the first mention

Minor league career

 * The term third base should be wikilink to the appropriate article only on the first mention
 * "Bohm signed with superagent Scott Boras in April 2020. [34]" - the space between the period and the ref is not needed

Philadelphia Phillies

 * "On August 13, 2020, Bohm made his MLB debut[35] against the Baltimore Orioles." - the reference should ideally be placed at the end of this sentence
 * "Bohm finished the season hitting .338/.400/.481 with four home runs and 23 RBIs in 44 games. - needs to verified by a reliable source

Review will not be completed
I pinged MWright96 on their talk page, and they will not be returning to this review. Accordingly, I have returned the nomination to the pool of those awaiting a reviewer without any loss of seniority; the next review will take place on a different page from this one. BlueMoonset (talk) 15:35, 1 September 2021 (UTC)