Talk:Aleksandar Jovanović Ćuta/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 18:15, 19 August 2022 (UTC)

Happy to review the article to the best of my ability - I do not speak Serbian, but this should not hinder my ability to access the topic.

Lead section/infobox

 * Unlink member (not needed, as the parliament concerned is linked close by).
 * I would explain Stara Planina, as readers might not know what is is being referred to here.
 * Unlink football (common term, see MOS:OL).
 * Introduce Nebojša Zelenović and Dobrica Veselinović.
 * Amend 2022 general election to ‘2022 Serbian general election’ for the sake of clarity.
 * MP should be written in full.
 * Link environmental activist (Environmental movement); coalition.
 * British English (“travelled“) or American English (“centered”)? You need to be consistent throughout the article.
 * Remove since then to improve the prose.
 * Over the period, Ćuta organized protests – amend to something like ‘Ćuta has organized protests’ to improve the prose.
 * in order to preserve the nature is not needed and can be edited out.
 * In 2021, - the comma is not needed.
 * Ćuta was the ballot representative of the coalition – I don’t know what this means, it may need to be rewritten.
 * All ✅. --Vacant0 (talk) 09:43, 23 August 2022 (UTC)

1 Early life

 * Ćuta was born – his full name (without his nickname) is needed here.
 * Is nothing known about his parents or siblings? It would be unusual if this was true.
 * neighbourhood -  neighborhood (or neighbourhood) of Belgrade?
 * Unlink primary school (common term).
 * Ref 2 (Popović) gives his year of birth as 1960, not 1996.

More comments to follow. I will cross out those comments that I think are addressed Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 07:49, 23 August 2022 (UTC)
 * All ✅. There seem to be no information about his parents or siblings. Regarding his date of birth, I don't remember where I got that from although Ćuta was certainly born in 1966 (not 1960 nor 1996). I've moved the National Assembly profile source that backs up his year of birth. --Vacant0 (talk) 09:47, 23 August 2022 (UTC)

2.1 Early period

 * Imo it would make more sense if the title was changed to something like 2016–2020.
 * During his youth, Ćuta often travelled to Stara Planina, where his grandparents lived - This sentence belongs in the previous section, surely.
 * Unlink thank-you note (common term).
 * president – I would amend this to ‘the Serbian president’, for the sake of clarity.
 * Introduce Savo Manojlović.
 * Introduce Rio Tinto, so that readers know what is being referred to here (perhaps ‘the Anglo-Australian multinational company Rio Tinto’?).
 * travelled to – ‘stayed at’?
 * "Defend the Rivers of Stara Planina" organization – ‘organisation Defend the Rivers of Stara Planina’?
 * in order to post their activities regarding their activism is redundant and can be removed.
 * has also been a critic of the Serbian government due to their approaches - ‘has criticized the Serbian government for its approach’.
 * I would replace Ćuta with ‘He/he’ after he has been first named in a paragraph, to improve the quality of the prose.
 * the decision of constructing – ‘the construction of’.
 * were sent a verdict – this makes no sense to me.
 * they called for the institutions to react regarding the situation in Rakita – which institutions? What situation? Readers are having to guess what you mean here.
 * rejected his request - ‘rejected his demand’?
 * the regulations on environmental protection – ‘environmental protection regulations’ sounds better imo.
 * scientists, and professors – only one professor is mentioned in Ref 25 (Danas), and he is a scientist, so I would amend this to ‘and scientists’.
 * Ref 26 (Balkan Green Energy News) doesn’t seem to mention any call to "revolt".
 * The government mortgaged the river in Rakita – This seems a strange thing to do. Could it be explained why this was done?	And shouldn't this and the text that follows belong in the following section?
 * canceled or cancelled?
 * All ✅. I've removed "the government mortgaged the river in Rakita" because that seemed to have occurred back in 2017. --Vacant0 (talk) 09:59, 23 August 2022 (UTC)

2.2 2021–2022 period

 * '2021–2022' would be fine in the title, without including period.
 * Introduce Linglong Tire.
 * I would amend Utisak nedelje show to somethinh like ‘Utisak nedelje, a Serbian political television program’, for the sake of clarity.
 * Unlink enemies of the state (see MOS:LINKSTYLE about linking within a quotation).
 * Unlink police (unnecessary link).
 * The link environmental organizations doesn’t lead to where you would expect it to, and doesn't really seem all that necessary at this point in the article.
 * Introduce Nebojša Zelenović.
 * Why are "Environmental Uprising" and "Action" in quotes (not all organisations in the article are written with quotes around them)?
 * All ✅. --Vacant0 (talk) 10:02, 23 August 2022 (UTC)

3 Personal life

 * Jovanović is often known and referred by his nickname Ćuta. is mentioned too late in the article, as his nickname is referred to at the start of the first section. I would move the text up there.
 * Ćuta showed his interest into rock music during his youth, when he learned to play the guitar. He also often played football and chess - This all belongs in the Early life section.
 * was married twice – ‘has been married twice’ sounds better imo, as Ćuta is still alive.
 * He took part in The Weight of Chains 3 documentary film, which aired in 2019 - Why is this sentence here, as it seems to be more information about his political career? Ditto the whole of the second paragraph.
 * Unlink green party (it’s within a quote).

More comments to follow. Amitchell125 (talk) 08:40, 23 August 2022 (UTC)
 * All ✅. --Vacant0 (talk) 10:04, 23 August 2022 (UTC)

4 References

 * Ref 3 (Priče sa dušom) appears to be a self-published source – what makes you think it is reliable?
 * I've removed the source considering that the same text is backed up by other sources. --Vacant0 (talk) 10:07, 23 August 2022 (UTC)

5 External links

 * Facebook profiles should not be listed in Wikipedia (they have information that cannot be verified, they require registration to access them, and they are social media sites). See WP:LINKSTOAVOID and WP:NOSOCIAL.
 * ✅ Removed. --Vacant0 (talk) 10:08, 23 August 2022 (UTC)

On hold
I'm putting the article on hold for a week until 31 August to allow time for the issues raised to be addressed. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 08:45, 23 August 2022 (UTC)


 * Thank you for picking this up. I've amended the article. Vacant0 (talk) 10:09, 23 August 2022 (UTC)

Passing
Great work, passing now. Congratulations, Amitchell125 (talk) 11:20, 23 August 2022 (UTC)


 * Thank you! Vacant0 (talk) 11:21, 23 August 2022 (UTC)