Talk:Alexa Demie/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: XtraJovial (talk · contribs) 00:23, 22 May 2022 (UTC)

I'll start this review shortly. XtraJovial (talk) 00:23, 22 May 2022 (UTC)

Preface
After just under 1,000 revisions, the article sits at a wikitext size of 21 kilobytes, and a prose size of 5,333 bytes (912 words). Prior to this review, the article has been assessed as C-Class across all WikiProjects to which it is of interest.

Assessment
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it well written?
 * A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
 * B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
 * 1) Is it verifiable with no original research?
 * A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
 * B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons&mdash;science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
 * The article does not misuse primary sources, nor does it cite any self-published sources.
 * C. It contains no original research:
 * D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
 * B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
 * As broad as can be with sources provided and BLP policies allow.
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * On hold for the time being. See § Comments. Passed
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * On hold for the time being. See § Comments. Passed
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * On hold for the time being. See § Comments. Passed

Comments
While the article is reasonably well written, I feel like the following changes could be made.


 * A little more might need to be added to the lead section. Not much, but I'd suggest mentioning her directorial roles in some capacity—although they're just for music videos.
 * ✅. Added short sentence about Demie's music video direction as well as her appearances in music videos. Can expand/be more specific if necessary. ben ǝʇᴉɯ  04:16, 22 May 2022 (UTC)


 * "Demie was born in Los Angeles, California. She grew up in the neighborhood of Atwater Village, where she was raised by her mother..." might read better as "Born in Los Angeles, California, Demie grew up in the neighborhood of Atwater Village. She was raised by her mother..."
 * ✅. ben ǝʇᴉɯ  04:16, 22 May 2022 (UTC)


 * Infobox should mention Demie's mother, as she's mentioned—albeit briefly—in the article body.
 * ❌, as per the instructions for the   parameter in the documentation for the person infobox:  ben ǝʇᴉɯ  04:16, 22 May 2022 (UTC)

If you're unable to implement any of my suggestions, please explain why. Thanks! XtraJovial (talk) 03:39, 22 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Made two of the changes, small objection to one of them. Thank you so much for reviewing this! ben ǝʇᴉɯ  04:16, 22 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Alright; I've decided to Pass this article. Congratulations, and thank you for your nomination! XtraJovial (talk) 14:15, 22 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks again for the review! ben ǝʇᴉɯ  00:50, 23 May 2022 (UTC)