Talk:Alexander Buchan (artist)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Etriusus (talk · contribs) 03:51, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

I'll get this review. I'll have comments within the next day or so. Etriusus (talk) 03:51, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Intro
 * He died after the second one, the "second one" what? I think you mean seizure but it can also be interpreted as he went on a second voyage.
 * Rewritten
 * The intro as a whole is very short, can you expand this at all?
 * Did a little bit; let me know if there is something else you'd like included
 * The page would be improved substantially with an infobox
 * Added, although I don't have a lot of data to put in

Background
 * he was "young" when he was hired this contradicts the previous point. Reword it to say "he was described as 'young'..."
 * Done something
 * aware of this at the time. reword: "aware of this at the time he was hired"
 * there needs to be a sentence on why he was hired, otherwise the sentence "According to Averil Lysaght..." doesn't make sense.
 * evidence that he exhibited work Who exhibited work? Buchan? Banks?
 * Rewritten to hopefully address the three previous points.
 * Buchan family of North Berwick Specify this is Scotland.
 * Done, good point.
 * It could be a self portrait, Reword: It has been proposed to be as self portrat
 * done.

Voyage with Captain Cook
 * could use these to show them to his friends notable?
 * Removed (this is more or less what we have in the second Banks quote)
 * "coastal profiles" elaborate on what this is
 * Tried to explain. Odd that we don't seem to have an article.
 * To Banks' great relief, Buchan recovered. Puffery, in general, this sentence needs rewording to be encyclopedic.
 * Banks did write "thank god" but I have cut this short.
 * put Bank's quote in a quote block.
 * Done.

Death at Tahiti
 * he also stated about Buchan's work What work? his paintings?
 * I guess, but I shortened to "Buchan". He might also have mentioned the coastal work; Buchan's Rio de Janeiro is pretty good (see here for the middle third:, unfortunately I'm not sure this is PD) Lysaght (and I think some of my other sources too) is a bit surprised that Cook praised him so much, and wonders whether some other artwork was lost.
 * put Bank's quote in a quote block.
 * Done, also for Cook's.

Artworks and legacy
 * Maybe put a gallery template here and move some of his artwork here. The page's layout, specifically the last image is a bit clunky.
 * Tried something, please have a look.

Kusma Here are my initial thoughts. The article plays the pronoun game a bit too much and it can get confusing without clarification. Please let me know if there are any questions/concerns. Etriusus (talk) 02:49, 31 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Thank you for the review and for the useful suggestions! I'll look through your points in detail probably later today. —Kusma (talk) 07:05, 31 January 2022 (UTC)
 * @Etriusus, would you like to take another look? I have tried to address your comments (and I hope I haven't messed anything up!) —Kusma (talk) 23:27, 31 January 2022 (UTC)
 * @Kusma, I only have one final edit before signing off on the article. I went ahead and copy edited the article a small bit. Let me know if there's anything I changed that you disagree with. The templates added make the page flow substantially better. Overall, an excellent read about an otherwise obscure person. Excellent work!!Etriusus (talk) 04:55, 1 February 2022 (UTC)
 * @Etriusus, glad you like it! Please review changes since your last edit and let me know if there is anything else. —Kusma (talk) 09:38, 1 February 2022 (UTC)


 * the people are more elegantly proportioned Who stated this? It reads like OR.
 * That's what Bernard Smith (art historian) said. Instead of going for a direct quote, I have rewritten this part a bit, hopefully making it fit better with the rest of the article.


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Prose is fine; article broadly meets standards of MOS.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * Sources are reliable, and appropriate for this type of article; several were checked against the statements they supported with no issues found.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * Article has broad coverage with appropriate level of details.
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Yes
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * Yes
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * All images have licenses making them available for use in this article, they are used appropriately, and have useful captions.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * @Kusma Article passes GA review. Good work! Etriusus (talk) 03:11, 2 February 2022 (UTC)