Talk:Alexander Godley/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Dank (talk · contribs) 11:36, 24 February 2013 (UTC)


 * Hi Zawed, I'll get to this today. - Dank (push to talk) 11:36, 24 February 2013 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * Check the 2nd and 3rd links in the toolbox (upper right on this page); one of the urls isn't working, and one isn't the best url to use. Home Guard is a disambig link. - Dank (push to talk) 13:48, 24 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Hmm, wasn't aware of the url tool. Have fixed them and the dab link. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "brevet": link it
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "a posting in remote New Zealand may not enhance his reputation": wrong tense
 * Have rephrased. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "the somewhat amateur military establishment": "amateurish" might be appropriate, but only if the consensus is actually that harsh. What does McGibbon say?
 * Opted to remove the reference to amateur; it was supposed to refer to the military being partly based on volunteers at the time but in hindsight, the phrasing doesn't come off well. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "he personally intervened to counter a potential Turkish counterattack": in what way?
 * Have clarified. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "as well as the newly formed New Zealand Division": The sentence needs an "and" somewhere; you can substitute it for "as well as" if you like.
 * Have revised. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "frontline": front line (used as a noun)
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "As well as an award of the French Croix de Guerre, he was appointed in 1918 ...": The introductory phrase dangles. "After receiving the French Croix de Guerre" would work (if it was in fact after)
 * Have fixed. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "followed by an award of the Belgian Croix de guerre ...": This sentence needs an "and" somewhere.
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "considered for as a possibility": ?
 * Rephrased. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "Louise ... died in England. ... She lived in New Zealand": She had lived in New Zealand (and keep using past perfect until the sentence about the funeral).
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "Godley offered his services to the New Zealand government but this was not taken up": ... government, but got no response.
 * Fixed as per your suggestion. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * The references look good. The last two should be switched to be in alpha order.
 * . Fixed. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "Major aspects" seem to be covered, but I'm not a good judge of that; I understand this is headed to A-class, which is a better place to make this call.
 * Otherwise:


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality: ✅
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists: ✅
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section: ✅
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: ✅
 * C. No original research: ✅
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects: ✅
 * B. Focused: ✅
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias: ✅
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc: ✅
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content: ✅. Images are good.
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions: ✅
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail: Passed.
 * Dank, thanks for taking the time to review this article, your feedback is appreciated - I think I have to watch that "dangling". I think I have addressed all your comments as noted above.  Thanks again. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Happy to help. Your edits check out, and I made one tweak. I'm going to look at a few other articles before signing off on "major aspects". - Dank (push to talk) 13:12, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Passed GA. - Dank (push to talk) 02:20, 27 February 2013 (UTC)
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content: ✅. Images are good.
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions: ✅
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail: Passed.
 * Dank, thanks for taking the time to review this article, your feedback is appreciated - I think I have to watch that "dangling". I think I have addressed all your comments as noted above.  Thanks again. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Happy to help. Your edits check out, and I made one tweak. I'm going to look at a few other articles before signing off on "major aspects". - Dank (push to talk) 13:12, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Passed GA. - Dank (push to talk) 02:20, 27 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Dank, thanks for taking the time to review this article, your feedback is appreciated - I think I have to watch that "dangling". I think I have addressed all your comments as noted above.  Thanks again. Zawed (talk) 09:14, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Happy to help. Your edits check out, and I made one tweak. I'm going to look at a few other articles before signing off on "major aspects". - Dank (push to talk) 13:12, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Passed GA. - Dank (push to talk) 02:20, 27 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Passed GA. - Dank (push to talk) 02:20, 27 February 2013 (UTC)