Talk:Alexander W. Monroe/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Johanna (talk · contribs) 02:29, 13 October 2015 (UTC)

Second on my "to review" list. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 02:29, 13 October 2015 (UTC)


 * Comments
 * It's not so much near the top of the article, but watch repetition of "served" in military career and later political career ;)
 * I've removed some of the repetitive uses of "serve" in these sections. Let me know if any further uses should be changed. Thank you for the suggestion! -- West Virginian   (talk)  18:51, 17 October 2015 (UTC)


 * I think the lead might perhaps be a bit too long considering the length of the article. Specifically, it goes into too much detail about his military career, in my opinion. I trust your judgement in cutting the lead down.
 * I've trimmed the lede a little bit, but let me know if there is any specific content you assess as appropriate for removal. Thank you for the suggestion! -- West Virginian   (talk)  18:51, 17 October 2015 (UTC)


 * "oldest child and son" awkward and a bit redundant--he was obviously their first son if he was their first child.
 * I concur, and I've removed "and son." -- West Virginian   (talk)  18:51, 17 October 2015 (UTC)


 * "At the age of 18, Monroe and his siblings were orphaned" any details on the parents' deaths?
 * I was actually unable to find additional information about Monroe's parents, and their deaths. -- West Virginian   (talk)  18:51, 17 October 2015 (UTC)


 * Link to surveying.
 * Done! -- West Virginian   (talk)  18:51, 17 October 2015 (UTC)


 * "lucrative law practice" numbers?
 * The sources didn't provide numbers for this, so I can remove "lucrative" if need be. -- West Virginian   (talk)  18:51, 17 October 2015 (UTC)


 * I don't think "conscription bill" should be collectively linked to conscription, as it's a bit misleading. I expected a link to the a page on the Confederate conscription bill. If that exists, link to that. If not, retype as "conscription bill".
 * Done! -- West Virginian   (talk)  18:56, 17 October 2015 (UTC)


 * "Monroe continued to practice law in Romney." The use of "continued" makes for a bit of an abrupt transition.
 * I've changed this sentence to: Throughout his political career, Monroe continued to engage in the practice of law in Romney. Let me know if this works better or requires additional modification. -- West Virginian   (talk)  18:56, 17 October 2015 (UTC)


 * "who had been accused of murdering her lover Benjamin Brooks." And? What happened in the trial? Do we know?
 * I wasn't able to find additional sources outside the few newspapers available, so we do not know. Should we scrap this mention? -- West Virginian   (talk)  18:56, 17 October 2015 (UTC)


 * "at least four children" What does this mean? Are there doubts in the records or something?
 * I was able to find four children, but that doesn't mean that there weren't more. Since a source didn't say "four" exactly, I added at least as a caveat to the number of children I was able to substantiate. -- West Virginian   (talk)  18:56, 17 October 2015 (UTC)


 * Refs and checklinks look fine.

Nice work, as usual! Just a few things to clear up before I pass. :) Johanna  (formerly BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 04:11, 16 October 2015 (UTC)
 * Thank you for taking the time to complete your thorough and comprehensive review of this article. I will respond to your comments and questions within the next 48 hours. -- West Virginian   (talk)  19:51, 16 October 2015 (UTC)
 * I apologize for the delay in my responses. As you can see, in some areas the sources are a bit limited regarding the information they provide. Take a look at my responses and let me know if you have any outstanding issues. I always appreciate and value your suggestions and guidance. -- West Virginian   (talk)  18:57, 17 October 2015 (UTC)
 * Okay, that's better now. I changed "lucrative" for my own well-being. ;) Pass. Johanna  (formerly BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 03:55, 18 October 2015 (UTC)
 * Johanna, thank you for the review and for passing this article to Good Article status! As always, it was a privilege working with you throughout this process! -- West Virginian   (talk)  09:59, 18 October 2015 (UTC)
 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail: