Talk:Alexandre-Théodore-Victor, comte de Lameth

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Life Section
Hi, so one of the main points of concern in this article, apart from the lack of references that is already addressed, is that there is little explanation of the role he played in the National Assembly as part of the Feuillant faction. The overview for this article does not have enough material for a clear view of who Lameth was and what he accomplished. Also, the manner in which this section is styled is a bit distracting and confusing. The ending portion states about his brothers which I believe would be better situated at the beginning of the Life section if possible. Apart from that, most of the references come from one book. I hope to improve this article in the future. If anyone has any advice, comments, or concerns that they believe should be addressed in this article, please leave a message and let me know. Thank you.--IsaMMontes (talk) 02:24, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

Life Section
Hello, I noticed that this article had quite a few grammatical errors and structural issues concerning the main "Life" portion, so I decided to rearrange this section. I believe the last sentence " He had two brothers, Théodore Lameth (1756–1854) who served in the American war, sat in the Legislative Assembly as deputy from the department of Jura, and became maréchal-de-camp; and Charles Malo François Lameth.[6]" seems a bit confusing where it is placed, so I will arrange it into the first paragraph. The rest will just be slight grammatical changes; there are some commas that need to be placed in the second and third paragraphs. The first paragraph has some sentences that need to be reworded since they do not make much sense as they are, specifically the first sentence about his birth. Lastly, I will add some information about Alexandre Lameth's close relationship with his brother, Charles Lameth, as well as some of his background in politics. Please contact me if you have any advice or concerns about these changes that should be addressed in this article. Thank you kindly. --IsaMMontes (talk) 02:01, 6 February 2017 (UTC)

Added information
The Chronicle of the French Revolution, or the first reference in the bibliography, is the book that is most utilized throughout the entirety of the article. I do not intend to use this novel more than it already is but I do intend to check through each of the pages the previous author marked to be certain that there is no missing information or anything closely paraphrased.--IsaMMontes (talk) 17:54, 19 February 2017 (UTC)

Alexandre Lameth Revision
Hello everyone, so I just wanted to add that I will be placing new information of Lameth's status on his political career as well as other information on his relationships gained through his military service and on some of the works he wrote in his lifetime. I will be going back into this article later to add more on his early life, education, and on what he accomplished after he was released from prison. I also plan to go line by line in the article and delete or revise the sections that do not have any in-line citations. If anyone has any suggestions or comments please feel free to contact me and leave a message. Thank you kindly. --IsaMMontes (talk) 03:18, 20 March 2017 (UTC)

Links
Hello everyone, so in order to fix this article, I went through and deleted repeated sources and added new citations that corresponded to the text. I added more in-line citations, and a bit more information about Lameth's influence in America. If anyone has any questions or suggestions of how I can further improve this article, please contact me. Thank you kindly. — Preceding unsigned comment added by IsaMMontes (talk • contribs) 03:59, 27 March 2017 (UTC)