Talk:Alexandros Schinas/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kaiser matias (talk · contribs) 00:07, 12 July 2019 (UTC)

I'll go over this in the next few days. Kaiser matias (talk) 00:07, 12 July 2019 (UTC)

Comments

 * A lot of the citations used in the lead can be either moved to the body of the article, or outright removed, as they are covered in the article. As per MOS:CITELEAD you don't need to cite things that are covered in the article itself, and personally I try to avoid any citation in the lead unless absolutely necessary, and I'd argue a lot of these are not.
 * ✅ – Levivich 15:18, 16 July 2019 (UTC)


 * The fourth paragraph of the "early life" section starts by stating Schinas lived in New York, but it only notes his moving there after that. For the sake of keeping it easy to comprehend, I'd re-arranged that so you note the reasons for his emigration from Greece first.
 * How is this? – Levivich 03:29, 18 July 2019 (UTC)


 * "...Schinas was back in Greece in February 1913." This would read cleaner as "Schinas was back in Greece by February 1913."
 * ✅ – Levivich 15:18, 16 July 2019 (UTC)


 * The lengthy quote from Schinas in the "Death" section doesn't need to have his name and the year afterwards; by introducing it as a quote from Schinas it already covers those details. Same with the quote in the "Political" and "Personal" sections.
 * ✅, also for the two quotes in the "Motives" section. – Levivich 15:18, 16 July 2019 (UTC)


 * ..."Schinas died by falling thirty feet out of a window..." Use for the thirty feet.
 * ✅ – Levivich 15:18, 16 July 2019 (UTC)


 * For the reference section, you don't really need to add specific page numbers for the books; that is covered in the citations themselves.
 * ✅ – Levivich 03:29, 18 July 2019 (UTC)


 * Overall not a lot to fix. It's a fairly comprehensive article considering there is not much information on the individual, and the use of both contemporary and modern sources is nice. Kaiser matias (talk) 01:06, 16 July 2019 (UTC)

Thank you. I am pinging who is the major contributor. As English is not my native language, I hesitate to make changes at "prose, spelling, and grammar" but I 'll see what I can do elsewhere. Cinadon36 06:50, 16 July 2019 (UTC)
 * Thank you for taking time to review, Kaiser, and for the ping, Cin. I'll take a crack at helping with these revisions over the next day or so. – Levivich 14:27, 16 July 2019 (UTC) Update: I did some of the easy stuff :-) – Levivich  15:18, 16 July 2019 (UTC)

The article states that Schinas may have been an agent of "Macedonia". This is problematic as there was no state of "Macedonia" at the time. Khirurg (talk) 06:17, 17 July 2019 (UTC)
 * ✅ – Changed to "Macedonian nationalists" per the source – Levivich 03:29, 18 July 2019 (UTC)
 * See everything is good now, well done. Kaiser matias (talk) 23:57, 19 July 2019 (UTC)
 * Cool! Thanks again, and ! – Levivich  01:41, 20 July 2019 (UTC)