Talk:Alexios Strategopoulos/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Moswento (talk · contribs) 11:11, 3 December 2013 (UTC)


 * Hello! I'll have a look at this one. Review comments to follow below soon. Moswento talky 11:11, 3 December 2013 (UTC)

Overall, this is an excellent article. It's easy to read - despite the unfamiliar names - covers all the main aspects of his life, is well-referenced to reliable sources, and meets all other GA criteria. I have a few really minor queries on the text, and then I will happily promote this to GA. Well done! Moswento talky 11:01, 4 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Overalls


 * Lead
 * (optional) "he appears on the scene" - I won't insist on this for GA, but I think this phrasing could be improved. I assume the point is that this is when he's first mentioned in extant sources...


 * Origin and family
 * (optional) Inline external links are discouraged by the MOS, so although not essential, I would suggest moving the seal info link to a note or citation


 * Recapture
 * "as the end of the one-year truce concluded after the previous failed Nicaean attack was nearing its end" - "as the end...was nearing its end". I would cut out the first "as the end"
 * "Strategopoulos was initially hesitant," - this might just be me, but it reads oddly without telling the reader what he was hesitant to do. E.g. "Strategopoulos was initially hesitant to take advantage of this weakness..." ?


 * Later life
 * "He is last mentioned in a document from December 1270 for the Makrinitissa Monastery" - I think the nature of this document needs to be mentioned - otherwise we might think he became a monk!


 * Hello and thank you for taking the time to review this article. I am glad that you found it readable and understandable, as my greatest concern was that an uninitiated reader would get lost in the tangle of names and situations. You have raised a few good points, which have been fixed. Anything else? Cheers, Constantine  ✍  15:32, 4 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Yes, there is still one thing you lack - celebrate your GA promotion! Take care and keep up the good work, Moswento talky 16:33, 4 December 2013 (UTC)