Talk:Alice's Wonderland Bakery/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 05:47, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

First off, I'd like to note some of the reasons GA1 was flawed: lead sections do not need citations for material elsewhere in the article, and plot summaries do not need citations. Here's a more typical review for the page, and the changes are mostly copy cleanup.

Also want to shout out for keeping the page clean. Children's TV attracts a lot of vandalism, so that is always a larger task than for most pages. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:11, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

One general question: have any further episodes been released since July 21? It appears not.

Before the season tables

 * lesser-extent should be "a lesser extent"
 * resulting either missing "in"
 * Is there a citation for the cast list?
 * The show's end credits are used for this in accordance to WP:PRIMARY
 * Is the Mark Williams (disambiguation) page linked for Mark Williams (actor)?
 * The show's end credits are used for this in accordance to WP:PRIMARY
 * Is the Mark Williams (disambiguation) page linked for Mark Williams (actor)?

Production

 * Correct typo on "Lewis Caroll" [sic]
 * three-layers frosted cakes Should just be "three-layer"
 * greenlit to series, should be "the" series
 * children of that time Perhaps rephrase to "modern-day children". As worded "that time" might refer to 1951 or earlier, and later sentences make it quite clear that is not the case.
 * these include: Remove unnecessary colon or change entirely to "including"
 * "Disney Legend Kathryn Beaumont" is the award so integral to her that it merits listing here?
 * children of that time Perhaps rephrase to "modern-day children". As worded "that time" might refer to 1951 or earlier, and later sentences make it quite clear that is not the case.
 * these include: Remove unnecessary colon or change entirely to "including"
 * "Disney Legend Kathryn Beaumont" is the award so integral to her that it merits listing here?
 * "Disney Legend Kathryn Beaumont" is the award so integral to her that it merits listing here?
 * "Disney Legend Kathryn Beaumont" is the award so integral to her that it merits listing here?

Music

 * the series music director is "the series" redundant here? or maybe "music director for the series" to avoid what should be "the series's music director"

Reception

 * "a fun treat, but not one of Disney's standouts." Sentence fragment quote, so period outside of quotes (MOS:LOGICAL)

Spot checks

 * 4: The Futon Critic episode list. This is also the origin of some of the production codes. No inaccuracies seen. ✅
 * 17: April 1, 2022, ratings from SBD. Premiere had 190,000 viewers though an episode airing later in the day had 270,000. ✅
 * 34: Release of 7 episodes on June 28 per Digital Trends. ✅
 * 35: Animation World Network article. This contains Beyl's quote; the "heritage project" wording; the use of food to connect cultures; You have to really know what you want the character to do so that they can be rigged properly.; “And then the Princess of Hearts and the Queen of Hearts and the King are inspired by Cuban cuisine and culture. The set design and even the dialogue - we have Spanish phrases and dishes, their costumes, the palace - that was another opportunity to infuse more culture into the series.”; If we want to do an upside-down cake, we can actually make it upside down.. ✅ The various quotes are mostly what Earwig snags.
 * 46: Common Sense Media review. Quote is accurately reproduced, and Moulton's comments are well summarized by the article. ✅

Images
The show poster is non-free and has an appropriate NFUR. The 1951 Alice image is apparently permissible as not being published without a copyright notice in its time. Encouragement: Add alt text.


 * hopefully, all ✅. Pamzeis (talk) 12:56, 16 August 2023 (UTC)