Talk:All-China Women's Federation/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MrWooHoo (talk · contribs) 02:33, 17 October 2014 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this fantastic article! I will probably be starting on 10/18/14 at around 13:00-16:00 UTC. By the way, I do my review in a prose+source review format with a main review up front. (Here is an example: Talk:Who Wants to Be a Millionaire (U.S. game show)) Brandon (MrWooHoo) • Talk to Brandon!  02:33, 17 October 2014 (UTC)

Main Review
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{{GATable/item|1b|?|Everything complies with the MOS, except maybe the lead. Could you try and make it longer, like this article? When you take out the references in the lead, please put the following code under this:, then use {{tick}} or {{done}} If the change was only partially done use {{yellow tick}}, and {{cross}} or {{not done}} if the change could not occur. (If you would explain why, I would be greatly appreciated :P) To see code, go to edit source and copy the code.


 * History Section

"During the 2nd National Congress in 1922 the CPC issued a statement arguing for the end of Chinese traditions that repress women."
 * Add comma after the.
 * Are you sure you didn't mean after 1922? Anyway, {{done}}. --Bentvfan54321 (talk) 13:48, 9 November 2014 (UTC)

"In March 1938 at the First Women’s Congress held by the Women’s Federation..."
 * Add comma after 1938.
 * {{done}}. --Bentvfan54321 (talk) 13:48, 9 November 2014 (UTC)

"During the Cultural Revolution the women’s movement..."
 * Add comma after the.
 * {{done}}. --Bentvfan54321 (talk) 13:48, 9 November 2014 (UTC)


 * Organization Section

"The party still does have direct control over some aspects of the ACWF through cadres who work within the federation who may be receiving a government salary..."
 * Add comma after cadres.
 * {{done}}. --Bentvfan54321 (talk) 13:48, 9 November 2014 (UTC)


 * Challenges Section
 * No issues. Good.

{{ping|MrWooHoo}} Hey Brandon, are these the only outstanding issues? If so, I'd be willing to fix them, but if not, I'd suggest failing the article. Please let me know soon as I've got a lot on my plate and can only commit to this if these minor issues are all that needs to be fixed. I'll also note that I'm probably not the best person to expand the lead as I know absolutely nothing about this topic, but if typos and commas are it, I'll clean it up. Thanks! --Bentvfan54321 (talk) 03:17, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
 * {{ping|Bentvfan54321}} Hey Bentvfan54321, those are the only issues on the article. Thanks for being a quick nom :) Brandon (MrWooHoo) • Talk to Brandon!  01:07, 10 November 2014 (UTC)

Source Review

 * No issues. Brandon (MrWooHoo) • Talk to Brandon!  23:05, 5 November 2014 (UTC)

Comments

 * Note: I changed this disambig link here.