Talk:All India Institute of Medical Sciences, Jodhpur/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 19:49, 12 March 2022 (UTC)

Thank you for submitting this article at GAN. Unfortunately, it fails multiple aspects of the good article criteria, and should be failed until these issues are remedied. There are two major issues here.

The first is citations. Everything in the article should be backed up with a reference to a reliable source. The back half of sections like "Location" and "AIIMS Jodhpur Model of Medical Education" are unreferenced, as are entire sections like "AIIMS Hospital" and "Student activities". The basis of poor citations alone would be enough to necessitate an immediate failure of this article.

However, while I am here, I also want to comment on the prose. This article is very difficult to read, with short choppy sections that contain very dense paragraphs. I am going to make two recommendations. First, at a larger level, it is a good idea to look at examples of good articles in the field you want to promote to get an idea of what a good article in that subject looks like. We have lots of university good articles like Indian Institute of Management Rohtak, Indian Institute of Management Lucknow, and Geisel School of Medicine. Then, on a smaller line-by-line level, I would recommend going through the Guild of Copy Editors not now, but after making the earlier changes I suggested, to help with how the text reads.

In conclusion: I am failing this article for now. Add references, add content, and look at similar good articles, then go to the GOCE for a copy edit before resubmitting. —  Ghost River  19:49, 12 March 2022 (UTC)