Talk:All Star (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 06:29, 19 June 2020 (UTC)

Wanting to wipe out the only songs nominee from last month. --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:29, 19 June 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Target 7-inch to Phonograph record in the infobox
 * Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "a song by American rock band Smash Mouth" → "a song by American rock band Smash Mouth from their second studio album, Astro Lounge (1999)"
 * Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "it was released on" → "the song was released on"
 * Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "as the second single from their second studio album, Astro Lounge (1999)" → "as the album's second single" with the appropriate target
 * Done. Also corrected as this is the first single, not the second. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Oh I didn't know that, why is the album page listing as second single though? Also, change to lead single now with the wikilink. --Kyle Peake (talk) 19:38, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Done. The album page is wrong. It considers a song that was released as a single from a soundtrack album months beforehand the "lead single", but it was never a single from the album and "All Star" is correctly identified by sources as the first single. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 21:39, 30 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "The song was one of the last" → "It was one of the last tracks"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "Astro Lounge after the band's" → "Astro Lounge, after the band's"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "requested more songs" → "requested for more songs"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "In writing it, Camp drew musical influence from contemporary songs from" → "When writing the song, Camp drew musical influence from contemporary music by"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "Third Eye Blind and sought out" → "Third Eye Blind, and sought out"
 * done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "to the more ska-punk" → "to the more ska punk" with the appropriate wikilink
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "of the band's 1997 debut album" → "of Smash Mouth's 1997 debut album"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * ""All Star" adopts a more" → "the song features a heavier" to avoid repetitive wording
 * I’m not sure the wording “features a heavier radio-friendly style” makes the most sense there? I did add the first part though. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Maybe it doesn't; you should find a way to not repeat "more" in the same sentence either way though. --Kyle Peake (talk) 19:38, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "received positive reviews from critics" → "received generally positive reviews from music critics" with the target
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Also, note what was praised by critics, specifically, in this sentence
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "for the Grammy Award for Best Pop Performance by a Duo or Group with Vocals" → "for Best Pop Performance by a Duo or Group with Vocals"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "have regarded the song favorably" → "have regarded "All Star" favorably"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * The chart positions are out of order; you should mention that it reached the top 10 of lead charts first, then mentioned topping secondary US charts. Also, change "All Star" to the song in this sentence.
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "ranking in the top ten" → "ranking in the top 10 of the charts"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Target to Billboard Hot 100 should be on Billboard Hot 100
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * I will probably have further comments after you have fixed ordering
 * "the Billboard Hot 100 and topping" → "the Billboard Hot 100, while topping" to avoid repetitive wording
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 21:39, 30 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Why no mention of the music video here?
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 21:39, 30 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "ubiquitous in popular culture following multiple" → "ubiquitous in popular culture, following multiple"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "most notably in the 2001 DreamWorks Animation film Shrek," → "most notably in Shrek from 2001."
 * I’ve made a different change here - added (2001) after Shrek to match it with how Astro Lounge is listed above. Does that work? <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "and received renewed popularity in the 2010s" → "It received renewed popularity in the 2010s"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "ranking as one of the most-streamed" → "while ranked as one of the most-streamed" with the target
 * Changed this to “and ranked”. “While ranked” doesn’t seem to work grammatically? <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)

Background and recording

 * Img needs alt text
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Remove the release year in brackets from the main text
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "the last song recorded for Astro Lounge (1999), Smash Mouth's second album" → "the last song recorded by Smash Mouth for Astro Lounge in 1999"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "Like the rest of the album" → "Along with the rest of the album"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Target mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Target engineered to Audio engineer
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "on the strength of its" → "from the strength of its"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "no other hits had been spawned from the record" → "the album did not spawn any other hits"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "some to label the band a" → "to some labeling the band a"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "the band's producer, said the album" → "Smash Mouth's producer, said the album"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "returned by buyers as the rest of the album" → "returned by buyers, as the rest of it"
 * done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "very little like "Walkin' on the Sun"" → "very little like the single" since we know which single this refers to
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "In creating Astro Lounge, the band" → "For the creation of Astro Lounge, the band"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "the band's guitarist, was tasked with" → "Smash Mouth's guitarist, had the task of"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "for Astro Lounge due" → "for the former due"
 * I really don't like this proposed wording here. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * I feel as if it becomes repetitive to write the title out too many times. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:59, 29 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Target pop to Pop music
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "Smash Mouth presented it to Interscope, their record label" → "Smash Mouth presented it to their record label Interscope"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "the label declined to release it" → "the label declined a release"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "they felt it didn't have a viable first or second single" → "they felt there was no viable first or second single" with the target
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "him to a copy of Billboard" → "him to a copy of Billboard magazine"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "which featured artists like" → "which included artists such as"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "which would become the first two singles from the album" → "which later became the first two singles from Astro Lounge"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "In writing "All Star", Camp considered" → "For the writing of "All Star", Camp considered"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "Many of the fans that had written" → "Many of the fans that had written to"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "with the band. Camp" → "with the band, and Camp"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "with the upbeat instrumentation" → "with the upbeat instrumentation of the song" with the wikilink
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "The band had very little time" → "Smash Mouth did not have much time"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "to record instead of their regular drummer" → "for recording instead of their regular drummer"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Target drum loops to Looping (music)
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Are you sure the last sentence of this section shouldn't be in the following section instead?
 * Not sure what you mean here? It references the recording process, which is why I included in here. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * It is about who performes the whistling, which is part of the composition but not included in that section as of current. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:59, 29 June 2020 (UTC)
 * I suppose the whistling could be mentioned in composition, but who performs it isn't really relevant there. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 21:40, 30 June 2020 (UTC)

Composition

 * "key of F♯ major with" → "key of F# major, with"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "described it musically as alternative rock[6] and power pop.[7]" → "described it as an alternative rock and power pop track, musically.[6][7]"
 * This shouldn't be done since it makes it appear like the two sources say both of them. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "According to an interview in 2017, songwriter Greg Camp was interested" → "During to an interview in 2017, Camp stated he was interested"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "with the stripped-down song: the social battle cry" → "with the stripped-down song; the social battle cry"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Add wikilink on music videos
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Merge the second para with the first
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "he described as a "tradition" for the band" → "he called a "tradition" for Smash Mouth"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "according to Camp, the band" → "according to him, the band"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)

Critical reception and accolades

 * "received a generally favorable reception from music critics" → "was met with generally favorable reviews from music critics" with the target
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Merge the following sentence with this one, since that should be done grammatically here; however, you can add more of what was praised in the lead instead
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "example of the band's musical progression" → "example of Smash Mouth's musical progression"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "Todd Norden of the Calgary Herald" should be the start of a new sentence
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "praised it as being" → "praised the track for being"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "than the songs on Fush Yo Mang" → "than the tracks on the album,"
 * Not sure this works here as the context is their previous album, Fush Yo Mang, not Astro Lounge, where All Star is from. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * You're right, keep as the album's title like it is but that comma is needed for grammar fixing. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:59, 29 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 21:41, 30 June 2020 (UTC)
 * [10][11] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "The Associated Press praised it" → "the staff of the Associated Press praised it"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "as an example of the band's" → "as an example of their"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "infectious"[13] and" → "infectious", and"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * [13][14] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "felt it had the potential to be a hit" → "felt that the song had potential to be a hit"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "Sandra Sperounes" → "Sandra Sperounes from"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "as an example of the band's" → "for being an example of Smash Mouth's"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "specifically its" → "specifically noting its"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "calling it a" → "calling the song a"
 * done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink MTV to itself
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "At the 42nd Annual Grammy Awards," → "At the 42nd Annual Grammy Awards in 2000,"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "losing to Santana's" → "ultimately losing to Santana's"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "from the editorial staff of" → "from the editorial staff of both"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "ranked it as one of the best songs" → "ranked the former among the best songs"
 * Not sure this is the best wording here, since there's no latter. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Was thinking so, as a mention of "Maria Maria" is included, but context makes things obvious as to what "it" is in reference to. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:59, 29 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "noted its lasting cultural impact" → "noted the song's lasting cultural impact"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink Shrek to itself
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Target popular meme to Internet meme
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * [19][22] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "and had become a" → "and became a"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "called it " the best reason" → "called the song "the best reason"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * What does "glowing review" mean?
 * Very positive. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "lauded the song as having" → "lauded the song for having"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink Noisey to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "Annalise Domenighini calling it" → "Annalise Domenighini calling the song"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink ska to itself
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)

Release and chart performance

 * Retitle to Release and commercial performance
 * Remove the img since it is of no relevance
 * "May 4, 1999[25][26] as the first single" → "May 4, 1999,[25][26] as the lead single"
 * "It was also the first single for" → "Also, it was the lead single from"
 * "soundtrack album for" → "soundtrack album for the superhero film"
 * Wikilink Mystery Men to itself and add (1999) in brackets
 * "It entered the Billboard Hot 100" → "The song entered the US Billboard Hot 100"
 * "on the chart week of May 22, 1999" → "on the week of May 22, 1999"
 * [29][30] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
 * "number four on August 14" → "number 4 on August 14 of that year" per MOS:NUM
 * "would peak at number one" → "peaked at number one"
 * "chart[31] as well as on the" → "chart, as well as on the US"
 * [31][32][33] should all solely at the end of the sentence
 * The Alternative Songs chart position should start the following sentence after those three peak positions
 * "peaked at number two on the Alternative Songs chart and number five on the Adult Alternative Songs chart, respectively" → "peaked at number two and five on the Alternative Songs and Adult Alternative Songs charts, respectively" with the target
 * "It has been certified triple platinum in the United States." → "It has since been certified triple platinum by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA) for selling 3,000,000 certified units in the United States." with the target, and add the appropriate ref at the end of the sentence
 * "also achieved success internationally" → "achieved further success internationally"
 * "Top Singles chart[36] and numbers four" → "Top Singles chart, and numbers four"
 * [36] should not be mid sentence when it is at the end anyway
 * "It charted in the top ten in Australia" → "It charted in the top 10 of Australia"
 * "in the top 20 in" → "and the top 20 in"
 * "and in the top ten on the year-end" → "and in the top 10 of the year-end US"
 * Mention these as being year-end charts for 1999 at the end of the sentence
 * "in the year-end charts" → "on the year-end charts"
 * "ranking at numbers 31 and 4" → "ranking at number 31 and 4"
 * "The song has been" → "The song has since been"
 * Target should be to Music recording certification and be solely on certified instead
 * "It has been certified triple platinum in the United States.[47]" remove, since it is repeated entirely from the first para of this section
 * Mention what position it charted at on the Rock Streaming Songs chart in 2017 with the appropriate ref, and wikilink to itself
 * "It ranked as one of the" → "The track ranked as one of the"
 * "of 2017 and 2018 and ranked" → "of 2017 and 2018, and ranked"
 * "year-end Rock Streaming Songs chart" → "year-end US Rock Streaming Songs chart"

I think I got everything except the 2017 RSS position, as I don't have a subscription to view the entire chart. I also added a few more missing chart refs. ResPM come to my window 12:50, 20 June 2020 (UTC)
 * If you can't fix this, then why not just remove the 2017 info and only keep the other info about the chart? --Kyle Peake (talk) 17:14, 25 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Well, I was assuming someone else would take care of it, but I'll tweak the sentence a bit. ResPM come to my window 17:27, 25 June 2020 (UTC)

Music video

 * "the music video features cameos by" → "the accompanying music video features cameos by"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "from the superhero film Mystery Men (1999)," → "from Mystery Men,"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "prominently featured the song" → "prominently features "All Star""
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink on body doubles
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "The video opens with the characters" → "The visual opens with the characters"
 * Why visual? Not familiar with that wording here. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * That term is often used an alternative for music video in these sections across Wikipedia articles. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:59, 29 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 21:41, 30 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "seeking recruits. The group rejects" → "seeking recruits, with the group rejecting"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "expressing interest in Harwell" → "expressing interest in Steve Harwell"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "The remained of the video focuses on Harwell" → "The remainder of the video focuses on him"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "rescuing a dog from a burning building and flipping over a toppled school bus" appears not to be backed up by the ref
 * The music video link embedded in the site does. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "In June 2019, the video was" → "In June 2019, the music video was"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink on subtitles full word instead
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "By that point it had received" → "By that point, it had received"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Remove "and it has over 286 million views..." since YouTube is continuously updated
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)

Live performances

 * "The band performed" → "Smash Mouth performed"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "in July 1999 at" → "in July at"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "in reference to plans to" → "referencing plans to"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "rain as the opening act of" → "rain, appearing as the opening act of"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "A June 14, 2015 performance of the song" → "On June 14, 2015, a performance of the song by Smash Mouth"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "the crowd, threatening to beat up anyone who threw things onto the stage" → "the crowd, with him threatening to beat up anyone who threw things"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "sang the song in place of Harwell" → "sang the song in place of him"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "had passed out in the middle of the set" → "passed out in the middle of the set"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "but the band continued" → "but the band continued their set"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)

Film and popular culture

 * "It featured in 1999's" → "The song was featured in 1999's"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "where the band performs it" → "in which the band performs the song"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "live concert over the" → "live concert, over the"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Remove wikilink on Shrek
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "where it plays over the" → "being played over the"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Merge the second para with the above one, since Shrek is first mentioned in the first
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "about being featured in what" → "about being involved with what"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "the band was impressed" → "the band members were impressed"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "for the movie's ending" → "for the ending"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "suggested they use" → "suggested for them to use"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "perfectly fit the tone" → "perfectly fits the tone"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "is commonly played at" → "has been commonly played at"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Remove target on sporting events
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "that the band played it" → "that Smash Mouth were led to playing it"
 * I don't think this is an improvement because I'm not sure what this means? <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * The popularity among sports fans lead to them playing it at that event. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:59, 29 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 21:42, 30 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Remove wikilink on 1999 Home Run Derby
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "Derby and has performed it" → "Derby, and have performed it"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "The musical only has one song, "All Star", adapted" → ""All Star" is the sole song of the musical, being adapted"
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)

Parodies and memes

 * Remove wikilink on internet meme
 * "being used in mashups" → "being used for mashups"
 * [4][66] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
 * "said that it" → "said that the song"
 * "as well as the opening" → "as well as its opening"
 * Target parody to Parody music
 * "on the platform;" → "on the platform."
 * "the video, themed" → "The video, themed"
 * "has over 1.5 million views" → "has received over 1.5 million views"
 * Remove target on mashup
 * "albums (Mouth Sounds" → "albums; Mouth Sounds"
 * This and the one below aren't a proper use of semicolons.
 * "and Mouth Moods) that" → "and Mouth Moods, which"
 * "alongside other popular songs" → "as well as other popular songs"
 * "Mouth Sounds in particular has" → "Mouth Sounds, in particular, has"
 * ""All Star" received additional exposure" → "The track received additional exposure"
 * "The music video for "All Star" also" → "The accompanying music video also"
 * "a massive uptick in views on" → "a large increase in views on"
 * "and peaked at" → "and reached a peak of"
 * "Harwell said the band considers" → "Harwell said they consider"
 * "because they released" → "due to having released"
 * "the band has" → "Smash Mouth has"
 * "and considers the" → "and consider the"
 * "to feature in remixes or covers" → "to feature on remixes and covers"
 * "in any because "we feel" → "in any because "they feel"
 * This is a quote, I'm not going to change a quote to something he didn't say.
 * "who is no longer with" → "who has since left"
 * I don't think this is useful as it implies he left after the interview took place.
 * All of these are done except as noted above. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 01:56, 29 June 2020 (UTC)

Formats and track listings

 * Retitle to Track listings, since that makes it obvious this is for different formats
 * Done <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:45, 23 June 2020 (UTC)

Personnel

 * Retitle to Credits and personnel
 * (Credits from the album liner notes)[2] → Credits from liner notes of Astro Lounge.[2]
 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel
 * Make sure that you don't mess up Michael Urbano, especially
 * All of these should be fixed. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:30, 23 June 2020 (UTC)

Charts and certifications

 * Retitle to Charts
 * This has been done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:17, 21 June 2020 (UTC)

Weekly charts

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * Wikilink Rock Streaming Songs to itself
 * Remove target on Billboard in the 2019 chart table, since that is the second table
 * All of these appear to be done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:26, 23 June 2020 (UTC)

Year-end charts

 * These different years should be split into separate tables
 * Done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)
 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION, the caption will be different here though
 * I think this is done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)
 * The 1999 table should be made sortable
 * This has been done one. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Remove targets on ARIA, RPM and Billboard
 * Done, I think? <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)
 * US Hot 100 (Billboard) → US Billboard Hot 100
 * Done, I think? <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Remove wikilinks on Alternative Songs, Adult Top 40 and Mainstream Top 40
 * This has been done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Don't know why that Hot Soundtrack Singles chart is there, sure you shouldn't remove it?
 * This has been done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)
 * For the 2017, 2018 and 2019 charts, remove the targets
 * This has been done. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)

All-time charts

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * Make sure you put in brackets the span of what years that all time chart took into account

Took care of everything here. ResPM come to my window 19:21, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks, I have since added more suggestions though. --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:03, 20 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Captions added in; an IP added the year span. ResPM come to my window 12:18, 20 June 2020 (UTC)

Certifications

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * This has been fixed I think <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:16, 21 June 2020 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

 * after reviewing this long article, will be fine once you fix the issues! --Kyle Peake (talk) 19:02, 19 June 2020 (UTC)
 * I'll go through these as time permits. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 00:15, 21 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Have done some copy editing to help out and commented just now. --Kyle Peake (talk) 17:14, 25 June 2020 (UTC)
 * I'll look at this later today, thanks for the patience. Lots of stuff to go through here. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 17:46, 25 June 2020 (UTC)
 * That's great to hear --Kyle Peake (talk) 18:08, 25 June 2020 (UTC)
 * I'll try and finish the few sections left tomorrow. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 01:46, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * I will put any responses to queries directly below them. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:59, 29 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Great, I’ll respond to any of them and finish off the references (the last section left) today. <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 12:38, 29 June 2020 (UTC)
 * I've addressed all issues and responded to the comments above <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Toa</i> <i style="color: green; font-family: Mistral;">Nidhiki05</i> 21:43, 30 June 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅! --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:38, 1 July 2020 (UTC)