Talk:All Watched Over by Machines of Loving Grace/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 23:38, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

I intend to review this. Eddie891 Talk Work 23:38, 9 January 2022 (UTC) Some thoughts to kick us off. these are all suggestions, nothing too major sticking out. Eddie891 Talk Work 23:48, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
 * How long is the poem?
 * Added the numbers, but it's just my own count. That ok? &mdash; Rhododendrites  talk \\ 00:19, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Yes, the source you cite has the poem-- easy enough to simply count or plug into a character counter to independently verify. This is fundamentally a basic calculation. Eddie891 Talk Work 00:56, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ &mdash; Rhododendrites  talk \\ 04:10, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Books such as FN 5 are wanting of page numbers-- not seeing where it supports the text "Most critics take the poem as a counterculture, communitarian adoption of Cold War-era technological visions."
 * Added some page numbers where quotes are used. In that example, I modified the sentence and added a couple cites. &mdash; Rhododendrites  talk \\ 04:10, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
 * FN 7 is broken
 * ✅ &mdash; Rhododendrites  talk \\ 04:10, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Who is Vijay Nambisan? From the quote alone, I'm not sure what it means when he says he chose it. For what?
 * From what I gather, he selected poems for The Hindu and that was the one he featured that day. I added some context. &mdash; Rhododendrites  talk \\ 04:10, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Who is Steven Moore?
 * ✅ &mdash; Rhododendrites  talk \\ 04:10, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Who is Robert J. Gangeware?
 * ✅ &mdash; Rhododendrites  talk \\ 04:10, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "of our relationship with technology" suggest rephrasing to remove the collective "our"-- which doesn't say who 'our' is
 * ✅ &mdash; Rhododendrites  talk \\ 04:10, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Suggest a brief gloss of who The Diggers were in the article-- also what does saying he "gave" it to them mean? Did he give permission, copyright, something else?
 * Clarified, added a bit a bout the Diggers. &mdash; Rhododendrites  talk \\ 04:10, 16 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Haven't found any major sources that would greatly expand the article Eddie891 Talk Work 01:37, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
 * I think I've addressed the above. Sorry (sort of) to say, I did find a few more citations and added a bit more to the article. :) &mdash; Rhododendrites  talk \\ 04:10, 16 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the review. I've just come across a book which has some useful passages. It may take a couple days to go through it and address the above. &mdash; Rhododendrites  talk \\ 04:35, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
 * No worries, take your time. Eddie891 Talk Work 13:36, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
 * I've been through the changes and am satisfied with them Eddie891 Talk Work 14:42, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Other checks: Sources are reliable, earwigs indicates no copyvio. Spot checked a couple and they line up. I'm satisfied this meets the GA criteria. Eddie891 Talk Work 14:46, 17 January 2022 (UTC)