Talk:All for You (Janet Jackson song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Benmite (talk · contribs) 04:30, 3 March 2024 (UTC)

Gonna start reviewing this soon! :D ben ǝʇᴉɯ  04:30, 3 March 2024 (UTC)

Copyvio check
According to the detector, 36.7%. Good! ben ǝʇᴉɯ 18:49, 10 March 2024 (UTC)

Background and development

 * Summarize last two sentences as


 * Include which album of this this was for her with a source


 * MTV News link is dead
 * Also no need to use that ref twice in consecutive sentences, remove first use


 * The "usually listen to older songs together to find inspiration" sentence is crufty and overlong, change to  with all pipe links


 * Add before Change's name


 * Remove


 * Change to


 * Move sentence to Recording and composition section
 * Change to


 * Change last sentences ( to
 * An explanation for why she was absent from the public eye at the beginning of the section, as well as how long the "extended period of time" was, would be good.

Release

 * Back-to-back use of the same dead MTV News ref again, only needs one at the end of the second sentence.


 * Change to


 * Move refs 6 and 7 to the end of its sentence


 * Move ref 10 to the end of its sentence


 * Something should be included about when it was announced that the album would be titled after the single

Recording and composition

 * Is Flyte Tyme Studios owned by Jam and Lewis? If so, include that with a source


 * Change to  Remove pipe for Jimmy Jam and Terry Lewis


 * Move to right before
 * Remove from before Change's name


 * Remove comma after


 * Change to


 * Remove pipe for recorded


 * Change to


 * Remove first use of ref 21


 * Move and associated ref to first section next to mention of sample, remove everything else from that sentence


 * Change to
 * Move ref 24 to end of sentence
 * Change to


 * Remove
 * Add before


 * Change to


 * Shorten quoted lyrics from third paragraph, change to  ben ǝʇᴉɯ  18:49, 10 March 2024 (UTC)


 * Change to


 * Move ref 20 to the end of the sentence


 * Change to,  to ,  to


 * Remove comma before


 * Change last sentence to

Critical reception

 * Remove first sentence (no ref)


 * Add comma after


 * Remove


 * Change to


 * Change to


 * Change to  per ref


 * Remove


 * Add between  and


 * Add pipe to Wall of Sound


 * Change to


 * Change to


 * Remove


 * Remove, change to


 * Replace comma with period after


 * Add after


 * New paragraph starting with Browne review
 * Change to


 * Change to   ben ǝʇᴉɯ  19:20, 10 March 2024 (UTC)


 * Move ref 36 to the end of the sentence ben ǝʇᴉɯ  23:45, 15 March 2024 (UTC)


 * Change to


 * Remove comma after


 * Change to


 * Remove (confusing wording)


 * Change both instances of to  or another word (MOS:WTW)


 * Change comma right before ref 40 to a period
 * Move ref 18 to the end of this sentence


 * Change to


 * Add after


 * Add commas before and after
 * Change to


 * Add before


 * Remove comma before


 * Change to


 * Add before


 * Change to   ben ǝʇᴉɯ  19:05, 20 March 2024 (UTC)

Commercial performance

 * In image caption, add {{tquote|by


 * Remove {{tquote|made radio airplay history, as it}} (redundant)


 * Change MTV to MTV News with pipe


 * Remove Lady Gaga sentence (source only mentions the placement of "All for You" on the Radio Songs chart)


 * Change {{tquote|a single that was not commercially available}} to {{tquote|an airplay-only single}}


 * Change {{tquote|, as well as the highest entry}} to {{tquote|and the highest debut}}


 * Move {{tquote|of the decade}} behind {{tquote|by a female artist}} ben ǝʇᴉɯ  19:31, 20 March 2024 (UTC)

Wikibreak
I see on your talk page that you're taking a wikibreak, so I'm not sure if you're available to respond to the edits I've made thus far. I'll give it a week and some change to see if there's a response and then continue making suggestions. ben ǝʇᴉɯ 20:10, 10 March 2024 (UTC)


 * @Benmite Hey there! Recently, I actually manage to do some GAR edits and incorporated some of the recommendations above. I'd be more than happy to help assist @11JORN in regards to completing the GAR on their behalf. Dcdiehardfan (talk) 22:07, 14 March 2024 (UTC)
 * That's great, thanks ! ben ǝʇᴉɯ  19:41, 15 March 2024 (UTC)

Final comments
I'm going to fail this one for now, mostly due to inactivity. I should have been more diligent with having things suggested on time, though I think once the nominator is back from their break, it should be okay to be renominated and I can finish the edits. ben ǝʇᴉɯ 00:49, 27 March 2024 (UTC)


 * Hi @Benmite, don't forget to submit this and any other reviews you did this month to the backlog drive! -- asilvering (talk) 00:26, 1 April 2024 (UTC)