Talk:All in My Head (Flex)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 14:53, 8 May 2017 (UTC)


 * I will grab this for a review if that is okay with you. Aoba47 (talk) 14:53, 8 May 2017 (UTC)


 * Comments from Aoba47
 * Reference 2 is dead/broken, and either needs to be replaced with a new website/source or with an archived version of the site from a website archive. Same comments applies for reference 32.
 * Make sure that each reference is complete, and includes a work/publisher (i.e. reference 3 and reference 8 and reference 40). Also make sure that the work/publisher is linked for each reference and not just on the first use. I would advise you to look through all of the references to make sure that this is fixed/corrected as there are several areas with this issue in the references. Also make sure that the information in the references are formatted correctly (i.e. italicized or not italicized where appropriate). For instance, the title of the song for the vevo reference should in quotations and not italicized.
 * Add ALT text for the image of Fetty Wap.
 * I do not see the need for the music video screenshot. It is generally encouraged to keep the use of non-free images to minimum, only using them when they illustrate a key point of the article that was heavily discussed in additional sources and/or would help the reader better understand the material. I do not see how an image of the singers in swimwear would better illustrate the text as the actual section makes the music video quite clear without a visual component. I would remove it altogether.
 * I am not certain what you mean by "clips" in this context (clips containing an interpolation of the 1995 song "Flex" by Mad Cobra). Please clarify this part; I am assuming you mean something about the beat/instrumental.
 * Revise this sentence (The song was selected as the 7/27's second single and had its debut live performance on May 22, 2016, during a special encore performance on Xfinity following the 2016 Billboard Music Awards.) as the part about its debut live performance is unnecessarily word for the lead.
 * The reference is not necessary for the information in the lead about the song being sent to radios as that should be stated and sourced in the body of the actual article itself.
 * At the end of the lead, you reference the song only as "All in My Head". Please be consistent with the title of the song throughout the article to avoid confusion.
 * Please write out the time in the sentence (The song is 3:30 in length), to say three minutes, thirty-seconds.
 * I would reorganize the first paragraph of the "Production and composition" section as it is a little unfocused, especially for an unfamiliar reader. I would suggest starting with basic facts about the single (i.e. the time length, the genre, what it samples) and then moving into the more specific aspects of the song (i.e. Dinah's quote). I primarily questioning if it is good to start with Dinah's quote before introducing the information about the song.
 * I do not believe the "burst forth" quote is necessary, and I think the information would be better conveyed in your own words.
 * The "Critical response" subsection appears a little unorganized and unfocused to me. It may be better to break the last two sentences off into their own paragraph on the mixed opinions of Wap's contribution to the song and then give a topic sentence to the first paragraph about the song receiving positive reviews from music critics to give this section more shape. The content itself is good, but just a little more structure would be helpful.


 * Final comments
 * You have done a wonderful job with the article; the c/e definitely helped to bring this closer to the GA level. My primary concerns are with the formatting of the citations so I would recommend focusing on that part first. Once my comments are addressed, then I will pass this. Hope this helps. Aoba47 (talk) 15:20, 8 May 2017 (UTC)

Thanks for you comments Aoba47. All suggestions were considered, try to adapted according what was posted. The dead reference was remove, I added two new references where the editor clearly said that the group co-wrote the song. The section "Production and composition" was change to "production and release", I thought the "release and reception" was unorganized, so I decided to create a specified topic for "critical reception" and "commercial performance." The screenshot and quote box were removed. I tried to fix everything as suggested, hope it seems better. Regards! LikeGaga (talk) 13:49, 9 May 2017 (UTC)
 * Response
 * Thank you for addressing my comments. You have done an excellent job with this article. I will ✅ this; I look forward to working with you further in the future. Aoba47 (talk) 15:51, 9 May 2017 (UTC)