Talk:All the Good Girls Go to Hell/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 12:43, 23 November 2020 (UTC)

I will begin this review today, though it may continue after the day --K. Peake 12:43, 23 November 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Separate the recording years using a semi-colon since it is not confirmed that recording was not continous
 * Wikilink all lowercase per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "The song was released for" → "It was released for"
 * Remove download and streaming since they are not backed up
 * " from When We All Fall Asleep, Where Do We Go?" → "from the album."
 * ""All the Good Girls Go to Hell" is a pop track. It sees" → "A pop track, "All the Good Girls Go to Hell" sees"
 * "climate change and takes the viewpoint" → "climate change and take the viewpoint" with the wikilink
 * Why is only the devil mentioned when she takes on God's perspective too?
 * "the top five in five countries," → "the top five of five countries,"
 * ""All the Good Girls Go to Hell" has received" → "The song has received"
 * "including a platinum award by" → "including being certified platinum in the United States by"
 * "and uploaded onto" → "and uploaded to"
 * "walk through a deserted road," → "walk down a deserted road,"
 * "praising the visuals message" → "praising the visual's message"
 * "promoted the song by performing it live at venues" → "promoted "All the Good Girls Go to Hell" by performing it live at festivals"
 * You should mention what year(s) she performed at those festivals
 * "Coachella Valley Music and Arts Festival, Glastonbury Festival and during" → "the Coachella Valley Music and Arts Festival, and Glastonbury Festival as well as during"

Background and release

 * "with Vulture Eilish's brother, Finneas O'Connell says" → "with Vulture, Eilish's brother Finneas O'Connell, known under his stage name of Finneas, said"
 * "God and the Devil, and" → "God, and the Devil, as well as"
 * "do all of this?'"." → "do all of this?'""
 * "in an interview on" → "in an interview with"
 * "the perspective of the devil and god," → "the perspective of the Devil or God,"
 * "He continues, saying it is" → "He continued, saying them looking down is"
 * "that "All the Good Girls Go to Hell" chorus" → "that the chorus to "All the Good Girls Go to Hell"" with the target
 * "Eilish shared in an" → "Eilish shared an"
 * Target Instagram story to Instagram Stories per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "March 25, 2020, a playlist" → "March 25, 2020 that featured a playlist"
 * "kinda "inspired" → "kind of "inspired"
 * "with the latter handeling" → "with the latter handling"
 * "mastered by John Greenham" → "The song was mastered by John Greenham"
 * Target Robert Kinelski to Cocaine 80s
 * "The song was first released on" → ""All the Good Girls Go to Hell" was released on"
 * Remove wikilink on When We All Fall Asleep, Where Do We Go?
 * "It was later released as the albums sixth single" → "The song was later released as the album's sixth single" with the target
 * "A flexi disc and cassette of the song was" → "A flexi disc and cassette for the song were"
 * "The release came with" → "The releases came with"
 * "to US customers via email." → "to customers in the United States through email."

Composition and lyrics

 * Target music critics to Music journalism
 * "noted the songs" → "noted the song's"
 * Wikilink G-funk
 * Wikilink Robert Christgau
 * "mentions the song has" → "mentioned the song features"
 * Target synths to Synthesizer
 * "while Jason Lipshutz of" → "and Jason Lipshutz from"
 * "commented about Eilish’s" → "said Eilish's"
 * "of the propulsive."" → "of the propulsive"." for consistency
 * "Lyrically, Eilish forsakes" → "Lyrically, the song sees Eilish forsake"
 * "mocks and walks away heaven," → "mocks and walks away from heaven,"
 * Target Catholicism to Catholic Church
 * "Eilish explains her degeneracies" → "with Eilish explaining that her degeneracies"
 * "climate change. 'Man is such a fool, why are we saving him?'"." → "climate change", noting that she quips: "Man is such a fool, why are we saving him?""

Critical reception

 * "has received mainly positive reviews from music critics." → "has been met with mainly positive reviews from music critics."
 * "Jon Pareles of" "Jon Pareles from"
 * "magazine, labeled the track" → "magazine labeled the track"
 * "Christopher Thiessen of" → "Christopher Thiessen from"
 * "one of the albums essential tracks" → "one of the essential tracks on When We All Fall Asleep, Where Do We Go?"
 * "Roisin O'Connor in his review for The Independent had negative thoughts for the albums first four track," → "Roisin O'Connor, in his review for The Independent, had negative thoughts for the album's first four tracks,"
 * "kind of momentum."" → "kind of momentum"."
 * "descroibed the songs title as" → "described the song's title as"
 * "John Murphy, stated that" → "John Murphy stated that"
 * Should 'Xanny' be surrounded by apostrophes like 'All The Good Girls Go To' is?
 * Kyle Peake, I think it should because it is a song. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 21:45, 23 November 2020 (UTC)
 * I meant to put "Shouldn't" not "Should" because it is not properly surrounded by them --K. Peake 08:39, 24 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "like 'All The Good Girls Go To'."" → "like 'All The Good Girls Go To Hell'"."
 * "across the beat."" → "across the beat"."
 * "Sean Ward, writing for" → "Sean Ward, for"
 * "compared the song" → "compared the song to the Spice Girls'" with the wikilink
 * Add release year of the song in brackets
 * "and interpreted the song" → "and interpreted it"
 * "and "flips so" → "and that she "flips so"
 * "the track's overall narrative."" → "the track's overall narrative"."
 * "describing it has an" → "describing it as an"
 * "damn appealing."" → "damn appealing"."
 * "Jules LeFevre, writing for" → "Jules LeFevre, for"
 * "but comments that the song is" → "while commenting that the song is"
 * "and melody" and you’re left" → "and melody", leaving you"
 * "it never happens."" → "it never happens"."

Commercial performance

 * "and number 15 on the" → "and number 15 on the US"
 * "which denotes track-equivalent sales of 1,000,00 units based on sales and streams." → "denoting track-equivalent sales of 1,000,000 units in the US based on sales and streams."
 * Move Canada sentence to starting the second para
 * "at number 19 and was certified" → "at number 19, and it was certified"
 * "by Music Canada MC for shipments of over 80,000 copies in the country." → "by Music Canada (MC) for shipments of over 80,000 copies in Canada."
 * "was later was certified silver" → "was later certified silver"
 * "for selling over 200,000 units." → "for selling over 200,000 units in the United Kingdom."
 * "within the top 5" → "within the top five"
 * "peaking at the top of the chart." → "peaking at number one in the country."
 * "was ultimately certified gold in New Zealand by the" → "was ultimately certified gold by"
 * "15,000 copies in the country." → "15,000 copies in New Zealand."

Background

 * Wikilink music video
 * "with an image that said "haven’t" → "of an image that said "haven’t"
 * Mention the dates of both teasers
 * ❌, they were both teased during the same week.
 * Can you mention the date of the first one then? --K. Peake 08:39, 24 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "The music video was directed by" → "It was directed by"
 * Target Los Angeles, California to Los Angeles
 * "the videos stylist talked about filming the video" → "the video's stylist talked about the filming"
 * "She revealed Eilish" → "She revealed that Eilish"
 * "agonizingly long takes."" → "agonizingly long takes"."
 * "She also added that" → "The stylist further added that"
 * Remove wikilink on global warming
 * "on the video description" → "in the video's description"
 * Target UN Climate Summit to Post–Kyoto Protocol negotiations on greenhouse gas emissions
 * "also asking to support" → "also asking them to support"
 * "which measured six inches" → "that measured six inches"
 * "explained it was in" → "explained the figure was in"
 * "a dioramic display."" → "a dioramic display"."

Credits and personnel
❌
 * Move to being the last sub-section here
 * Promonews should be italicised
 * The two sub-sections under this one should be sub-headings instead
 * Why did you not move it and keep the sub-sections? --K. Peake 08:39, 24 November 2020 (UTC)
 * K. Peake, I did move it. The sub-sections are better than sub headings. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 00:56, 25 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Production companies should be above personnel

Synopsis

 * Img looks good
 * "left off.[55] It opens with a shot of Eilish's back being stabbed by syringes" → "left off, opening with a shot of syringes being used to stab Eilish's back" and move [55] to the end of the sentence before [56]
 * "she falls down from" → "Eilish falls down from"
 * "her white wings and eyes start filling" → "with her white wings and eyes starting to fill"
 * "She tries to" → "Eilish tries to"
 * "but has a hard time." → "but struggles to do so."
 * "Eilish barely manages" → "She barely manages"
 * "her entire body and white wings are" → "with her entire body and white wings being"
 * "continues walk down" → "continues to walk down"
 * "starts to catch on fire." → "begins to catch fire."
 * "through the road and" → "down the road and"
 * "turns around, her wings" → "turns around; her wings"

Critical reception

 * Retitle to Reception since it mentions the awards
 * "saying it" → "said it"
 * "we've laid eyes."" → "we've laid eyes"."
 * Remove wikilink on MTV
 * "viewed thed video as" → "viewed the video as"
 * ""dark" and" → ""dark", and"
 * "was "more than just a music video."" → "is "more than just a music video"."
 * "stated that the video was" → "wrote that the visual is"
 * "while praising it" → "while praising the music video"
 * "to act right."" → "to act right"."
 * "Katrina Nattress of iHeart Radio described" → "Katrina Nattress of iHeartRadio described"
 * "The music video for "All the Good Girls Go to Hell" was" → "The music video was"
 * Wikilink 2020 MTV Video Music Awards
 * "for Best Cinematography, Best Visual Affects, and Video For Good." → "for the awards of Best Cinematography, Best Visual Affects, and Video For Good." with the targets

Live performances and other use

 * Retitle to Live performances and usage in media
 * ""All the Good Girls Go to Hell" was included on" → "The song was included on"
 * "Eilish and Finneas further performed" → "Eilish and Finneas performed"
 * "on November 24, 2019, making it her first ever" → "on November 24, making her first"
 * "switched to bass guitar, as" → "switched to playing bass guitar as" with the wikilink
 * "around the stage against" → "around the stage, against"
 * "ends, the teenager stares into the camera and sticks" → "ended, Eilish stared into the camera and stuck"
 * Target acoustic to Acoustic music
 * Wikilink Steve Jobs Theater per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * Target Apple Music Awards to Apple
 * "In April of the same year," → "In April of that year,"
 * "in the trailer of" → "in the trailer for"

Credits and personnel
Kyle Peake, what do you mean by this? The Ultimate Boss (talk) 22:14, 23 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Add a fullstop at the end of the credits adapted part
 * Add a fullstop after the album's title, even though there is a question mark; this is not a grammatical mistake since that's the title of the album --K. Peake 08:39, 24 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Target Rob Kinelski to Cocaine 80s

Weekly charts

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Year-end charts

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * Remove Israel since that is a ranking from favourites, not chart performance

Certifications

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Release history

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * Format → Format(s)
 * Label → Label(s)
 * Target Interscope to Interscope Records
 * Target Cassette to Cassette tape

Final comments and verdict

 * after reviewing over the course of today, faster than I expected but I'll give you time to fix the issues still! --K. Peake 16:56, 23 November 2020 (UTC)
 * I have responded where anything still needs fixing. --K. Peake 08:39, 24 November 2020 (UTC)
 * I did move the credits and personnel sub-section since you forgot about that, but everything else looks fine. ✅ now, glad to do so as I love this song! --K. Peake 16:34, 25 November 2020 (UTC)