Talk:Alonzo Clemons/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 08:48, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments That's about it. A lot to address here for such a brief article. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 09:18, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
 * As the individual is still alive, I do not believe that we can justify fair use on an image of him as a free one could still be created. The image needs to be deleted.
 * "Clemons suffered a ..." He suffered...
 * "United States of America" Just United States is fine.
 * "the accident.[3] The accident" repetitive.
 * "surprising" to whom?
 * File:ThreeFrolockingFoals.jpg has two fields with "n.a." which are insufficient justifications for those elements of NFCC.
 * Why can't a free image of that sculpture be obtained? Isn't it just outside and someone could take a photo?
 * Potentially yes, but I'd have to fly 10 hours to Chicago to do so, maybe the image could be replaced in time.--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 08:07, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
 * It's "frolicking" by the way, check that throughout.
 * "using clay, or, " clay is already mentioned but not linked.
 * "bitumen[1][2][6] to sculpt" I wuold move those refs to the end of the clause.
 * "or religious symbolic" do you mean symbols?
 * "a bull was" no need to link common English words.
 * "[4][2][10] Subsequently" order.
 * "by galleries and shown in art museums and at exhibitions around" no need to link any of these really.
 * "from God and" likewise.
 * Spaced hyphens in ref titles should be en-dashes.
 * Consistent date formats in refs.
 * If Out Front Magazine is a magazine, it should be in italics.
 * Ref 6 SHOUTING.
 * Ref 6 it's The New York Times, not New York Times.
 * Ref 8, p. not pp.
 * Ref 10, Focus is a work.
 * ISBN formats should be consistent.
 * Category has "outsider artist" yet this phrase isn't used at all. Suggest it's mentioned with an associated referenced if the cat remains.
 * Where is the 1958 birth referenced?
 * Source says he was three or four when the accident happened...

Thanks for taking this on, I will try to address everything this weekend. DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 16:48, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Everything should be addressed by now (except the ISBN, because I have no idea how they are formatted).--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 08:21, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I'm still dubious that fair use applies for such a simple-to-photograph outdoor sculpture, but hey. And ISBNs should just be all 10- or 13-digits, I use ISBN.org to fix them up.  However, not part of GA criteria, so I'll promote. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 11:40, 5 September 2021 (UTC)