Talk:Alvin Dark/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 08:16, 28 February 2021 (UTC)

I'll pick this one up, review coming as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 08:16, 28 February 2021 (UTC)

Lead

 * Al is a common hypochrism of Alvin so probably doesn't need listing per WP:OPENPARA.
 * Link World Series at the end of the first paragraph.
 * What does "lettered" mean, is it a common term in American sports? Is there a possible link for it?
 * Not sure myself - changed to played. I think that was there before I started working on the article! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 19:39, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Link the 1954 World Series as well.
 * Is the statement about him not being in the Hall of Fame, bit Rizzuto and Reese being in, relevant to the lead? Is it a well noted point that he hasn't been inducted?
 * It summarizes his career by referring to his career totals, and it is a point that's made in the SABR article on him. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 19:41, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "accused him of making racist comments, though, and he was fired", is though needed here, it seems to be making the sentence unnecessarily clunky?

Military service

 * "Upon his return to the states in", I'm assuming States should be capitalised here?

New York Giants (1950–56)

 * Link Associated Press.
 * Do we know what Conley was calling Dark in his rantbor are you censoring it?
 * The quote is the way it appears in Dark's autobiography. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 19:43, 3 March 2021 (UTC)

Later years

 * "After batting 297" and "batted 295, there are no periods before these mentions whereas the rest seem to use them, I'm assuming that's an oversight?
 * "Dark had a role in one of baseball history's weirdest plays", weirdest sounds a little informal, perhaps strangest or most unusual?
 * "with a count of 3-1", use an endash for scorelines.
 * "Because the ball was still in play, and because Delmore", the double use of because is a little repetitive. Could just start the sentence with As perhaps?

Manager

 * Link Sports Illustrated.
 * Temper tantrum seems to depict him as being rather childish. Perhaps something like angry outburst or fit of rage?
 * "slumped to a 62-99 record" and "triumphs in 1972-73", use an endash for scores, year ranges or records.