Talk:Ambrose K. Hutchison/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: David Fuchs (talk · contribs) 22:13, 28 January 2019 (UTC)

doing Should have comments by the beginning of next week. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs (talk) 22:13, 28 January 2019 (UTC)

Hey there, sorry for the delay. Overall, I think this is a pretty solid article, but one that still needs a little bit more work.


 * Prose :
 * He was born in Honomāʻele, Hāna, Maui, Who? The lead is supposed to be an intro, but it's not supposed to take the place of proper introduction in the body.
 * Fixed.


 * In December 1878, Hutchison was arrested and sent to Honolulu's Kalihi Hospital for examination. This could use some context. Was being suspected of having leprosy grounds for arrest? Or was he arrested for some other reason? Likewise, explaining that lepers had to live at the colony would be a useful detail to explicitly include rather than have to infer.
 * Changed some wordings around.


 * he served as assistant superintendent with Maui sheriff Thomas Evans and his successor former head of Honolulu police William Tell who is "his" successor here, Evans or Hutchinson. (It also reads a bit weird to place successor and former right next to each other.)
 * Fixed.


 * Images :
 * Given that there's no apparent definitive photos of Hutchinson, I'm not sure File:Ambrose K. Hutchison, c. 1920s.jpg has a particularly strong NFCC rationale. It doesn't help that the compression of the image is so low so as to make discernment of features pretty difficult.
 * Image is researched as the only verifiable picture of him.


 * Sources :
 * The Moblo, Pennie ref has a redirected link to, which doesn't mention the journal in question.
 * Unable to fix. It's an offline source in The Pacific Studies journal. KAVEBEAR (talk) 06:22, 10 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Anything else?


 * Other links look intact.
 * Don't have a Project Muse subscription, so unable to verify some of the sources. Spot-check of sources to refs 6, 12 and 19 checked out. Do you have any digital copies I can use for further verification? Further spot-check of sources looked fine. 19:23, 12 February 2019 (UTC)
 * I can wiki email you but you have to email me first. KAVEBEAR (talk) 06:22, 10 February 2019 (UTC)

-- Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs (talk) 20:42, 9 February 2019 (UTC)