Talk:American Pie Presents: Beta House/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Taylor Trescott (talk · contribs) 20:04, 28 December 2013 (UTC)

This has been sitting in the queue for a while, so I'll handle it.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 20:04, 28 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "seven [to] eight weeks" - Why does this need to be quoted? You can just rephrase it yourself.
 * "While largely overlooked by critics" This appears to be WP:OR - there aren't any sources saying this.
 * "he hasn't ejaculated for a few months" - "discovering he'd had sex" - Watch for MOS:N'T
 * "on aspects of writer Lindsay's own life" We can drop the "writer" here; we know he wrote the movie already.
 * "It was rated R by the Motion Picture Association of America, due to "pervasive strong crude and sexual content, graphic nudity, language and excessive drinking," per WP:FILMRATING you should remove this.
 * "However, not all reviews were negative. IGN's Hock Teh gave the film 5/10" That doesn't exactly sound positive.

I place this on hold. It's short, but covers what is known about the film.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 21:16, 29 December 2013 (UTC)


 * Thank you for reviewing the article. I have made the suggested edits. FilmTVComicsNerd (talk) 10:49, 30 December 2013 (UTC)