Talk:American logistics in the Northern France campaign/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 03:18, 13 August 2020 (UTC)

I'll take this review on. It may take me a few days to work through it, though. Hog Farm Bacon 03:18, 13 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Background
 * There's several instances of "would be". In various GA/ACR article's I've sent through the reviewing process, multiple editors have strongly objected to most instances of the would be phrasing as excessively passive voice
 * ✅ Except that "would be" is not the passive voice; it's the past future tense. Removed a couple of instances though.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
 * "The Overlord plan called for the capture of Cherbourg by D plus 8" - Probably best to have a brief gloss stating what D plus 8 means. I understand this, but readers without a good military history background may not.
 * ✅ Added a parenthetical explanation. In some other articles I have eschewed the use of this idiom, but the problem here is that D-Day moved.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Breakout and pursuit
 * " as a deception formation" - Is there a link for this? I understand what this indicates, but it's not a particularly common phrase.
 * ✅ Added a bit, with a link to Operation Fortitude. It doesn't explain "deception" either though...  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
 * " There were significant differences in the way Patton, a cavalryman, and Bradley and the VIII Corps commander, Major General Troy H. Middleton, who were both infantrymen" - I'd recommend linking to cavalry and infantry at the respective points, which would help underscore the difference for the uninformed.
 * ✅ Added links.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
 * "and SHAEF had" - This is the first appearance of SHAEF. What does the acronym stand for?
 * ✅ An artifact of splitting the original article in tow. I was afraid of this. Added an explanation.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)


 * POL
 * "The MT80 supply was adequate for the first month of Operation Cobra" - First mention of MT80, link or gloss what it is
 * ✅ Another artefact. Added an explanation.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
 * "with the First Army burning 501,000 US gallons (1,900,000 l) per day (282,000 US gallons (1,070,000 l) on 24 August alone)" - This is an odd clause. You state that it was using 501,000 gallons of fuel per day, indicating an average, but then call out a number barely half of that as if it is a significant usage.  I think there's a minor phrasing error here somewhere.
 * ✅ Typo. Should have 782,000 gallons (2,125 tons). Aside: the Germans measured their fuel in cubic metres. Fortunately, the mental conversion to kilolitres is pretty easy.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
 * Link C-ration
 * ✅ Linked. Another artefact.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)

And that's through the end of the POL section. More to come, but I've only found minor prose comments so far. Looking like a great article. Hog Farm Bacon 04:46, 14 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Due to the split, it has already passed GA and A class once; problems arise from the split itself.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Railways
 * LCT needs a link or gloss, ideally spell it out, since it's the first (only?) appearance in the article.
 * ✅ Linked.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  21:16, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
 * Same with LST
 * ✅ Linked.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  21:16, 14 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Motor transport
 * Move the Red Ball link from here up to where it's first used post-lead in the POL section
 * ✅ Used first here now.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  21:16, 14 August 2020 (UTC)

Through the motor transport section. More to come later. Hog Farm Bacon 20:39, 14 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Ports
 * Link mole to the relevant article, since this usage is arguably less well-known than the burrowing mammal
 * ✅ Done. Never seen one of the animals; there are not native.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:04, 15 August 2020 (UTC)
 * We've got them out the wazoo where I live; I know some people who have trained their dogs to hunt them. Quality article, passing now. Hog Farm Bacon 01:34, 15 August 2020 (UTC)
 * Link Liberty ships
 * ✅ Linked.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:04, 15 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Duplinks
 * First United States Army
 * ✅ Corrected.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:04, 15 August 2020 (UTC)
 * Courtney Hodges
 * ✅ Corrected.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:04, 15 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Captions
 * "[A jerrican depot" - Remove the extraneous bracket
 * ✅ Removed.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:04, 15 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Final note
 * The air supply section should be briefly referenced in the lead
 * Added a bit.  Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:04, 15 August 2020 (UTC)

That's it I believe. Heck of an article. Hog Farm Bacon 23:34, 14 August 2020 (UTC)