Talk:Amir Blumenfeld/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (talk · contribs) 06:10, 3 December 2013 (UTC)


 * I will do this review.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:10, 3 December 2013 (UTC)


 * WP:LEAD
 * I think the name Adrian is a detail that can wait until the main body. --TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:01, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Removed ajmint  (talk•edits) 23:06, 4 December 2013 (UTC)


 * Early life
 * Do we know what type of degree he got. --TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:01, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
 * He says in the cited article "I studied business", and I thought the fact that he went to a business school would make this obvious. I added the name of the program he studied under to clarify that it was undergraduate, and linked it to the relevant section at the Haas School of Business article. I don't think he's gone into more detail about his degree, but that section provides more information. ajmint  (talk•edits) 23:06, 4 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Lot's of business schools give Bachelor of Business Administration (I went to Michigan Business School &mdash; now Ross School&mdash; and this is what they give). Others like Wharton give Bachelor of Science, which is what I believe Berkeley gives.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 02:14, 5 December 2013 (UTC)
 * I have added Bachelor of Science to the article. ajmint  (talk•edits) 17:22, 6 December 2013 (UTC)


 * Jake and Amir
 * link Facebook. --TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:26, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Done ajmint  (talk•edits) 23:06, 4 December 2013 (UTC)


 * If I Were You
 * See WP:LASTNAME. --TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:26, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
 * First names removed for Van Veen, Seidell and Williams. ajmint  (talk•edits) 23:06, 4 December 2013 (UTC)
 * link The Concordian. --TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:26, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
 * It doesn't have an article: you may be confusing it with The Concordian (Montreal), but its about page shows it is associated with Concordia College (Moorhead, Minnesota), not Concordia University, Montreal. ajmint  (talk•edits) 23:06, 4 December 2013 (UTC)


 * Images
 * Why is File:Jake and Amir in character.png necessary. It has no FUR and with three other images of the subject of this article, I don't see what it adds. I don't see an element of WP:NFCC that justifies its use. --TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:34, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Removed. ajmint  (talk•edits) 23:06, 4 December 2013 (UTC)

This is a very good article. I am putting this on hold to await responses to my concerns above.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:35, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for reviewing! ajmint  (talk•edits) 23:06, 4 December 2013 (UTC)


 * I am now ready to PASS this article. Great job.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:51, 9 December 2013 (UTC)