Talk:Amou Haji/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Freedom4U (talk · contribs) 02:35, 6 August 2023 (UTC)

I'm failing this GA nomination under criteria one of WP:GAFAIL. Here are some of the issues I've found that would need to be addressed before a renomination: In addition to these concerns, I have serious doubts that this article meets the "broad in its coverage" standard required of Good Articles. I see the article mentions the documentary The Strange Life of Amou Haji, I would suggest taking a look at it and potentially incorporating it into the article. As it stands, the article does not provide enough information about Haji. : 3 F4U (they/it) 02:35, 6 August 2023 (UTC)
 * The article is poorly organized with unrelated sentences smashed together into paragraphs; many of the sentences also suffer from redundancy.
 * There are a number of examples of prose that are neither clear nor concise:
 * Once, "a few young men" attempted to forcefully give him a shower, but he managed to escape. - This and the below sentence also have unnecessary quotation marks.
 * His skin was covered with "soot and pus" as a result of his refusal to bathe.
 * Since he feared that soap and water might cause disease, he did not bathe for over 60 years from c. 1957–62 until shortly before his death in 2022. - This sentence can be condensed and made clearer.
 * It was claimed that he had become a hermit due to "emotional setbacks" after a heartbreak. - Weasel word. Who?
 * The word "claimed" seems inappropriate and casts undue doubt on his statement
 * Unnecessary over-quotation.
 * See WP:INTOTHEWOULDS. This article uses the word "would" where it is is inappropriate.