Talk:Ampullae of Lorenzini/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GeoffreyT2000 (talk · contribs) 04:37, 24 September 2022 (UTC)

I will check the criteria now. GeoffreyT2000 (talk) 04:37, 24 September 2022 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
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1a

 * Many instances of a comma followed by the word "and" need to be examined to see whether a comma is really needed or not.
 * , and of basal actinopterygians (bony fishes) such as reedfish - removed
 * , and a gel-filled canal (the ampullengang) which opens to the surface by a pore in the skin - needed
 * , and electrical properties similar to a semiconductor - needed
 * , and has a conductivity of about 1.8 mS/cm - needed
 * , and is considered an electroreception specialist - needed
 * Happy to explain why if there's any doubt; in each case, the sense depends on the phrasing.
 * Also, there are some other changes that could be made:
 * In the initial sentence Ampullae of Lorenzini (singular Ampulla) are electroreceptors, sense organs able to detect electric fields., it makes sense to replace, sense organs with , i.e., sense organs that are.
 * In my book that adds nothing useful: just makes the sentence longer. Perhaps this is a British English thing.
 * In Electrophysiological experiments in the 20th century suggested a sensibility to temperature, mechanical pressure, and possibly salinity under the "History" section, one could eliminate the adverb "possibly" without changing the meaning.
 * No, salinity was and is much more doubtful than the other listed parameters. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:50, 24 September 2022 (UTC)

GeoffreyT2000 (talk) 05:01, 24 September 2022 (UTC)

So, then there are no other fixes that need to be made (except for a minor correction where the word "and" was mistakenly removed instead of the comma). I am going to pass this GAN now. GeoffreyT2000 (talk) 21:25, 24 September 2022 (UTC)

Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 01:24, 25 September 2022 (UTC)