Talk:Amy's Choice/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Malleus Fatuorum (talk · contribs) 17:41, 21 October 2011 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * "A comedy writer by trade, Nye received suggestions from the show's executive producer concerning the execution of the episode". I'm not quite following that. What does "execution of the episode" mean? It would be better in any event to recast that in the active voice. Such as "The show's executive producer offered Nye, a comedy writer by trade ...".
 * Changed sentence to "Showrunner Steven Moffat suggested that Nye, a comedy writer by trade, build the episode around a split dream concept, and encouraged Nye to create a "monster" for the episode, which influenced his writing of the retirement home dream." I like that, it's much more concise. Glimmer721  talk  01:42, 22 October 2011 (UTC)


 * "It was partially filmed in Skenfrith, Wales". What was? The episode or just the split dream conceit? Shouldn't that be "concept" rather than "conceit" anyway?
 * Changed it to "The dream scenes in Amy and Rory's village was filmed in Skenfrith, Wales..." and changed "conceit" to "concept". Glimmer721  talk  01:42, 22 October 2011 (UTC)


 * Continuity
 * "... where it was alluded to the possibility the two were married". Doesn't seem to make sense. "Which alluded to the possibility ..."?
 * It now reads "...which alluded to the possibility the two were married." Glimmer721  talk  01:42, 22 October 2011 (UTC)


 * Writing
 * "He said that the dream world was consistent with other alternate universes within Doctor Who." Who said, Nye or Moffat?
 * Changed to "Nye believed that the dream world..." Glimmer721  talk  01:42, 22 October 2011 (UTC)


 * Filming and effects
 * "Karen Gillan had to wear a completely latex prosthetic stomach bump for the scenes in which depicted Amy as pregnant." And why "completely"?
 * Removed "in" and "completely", as it really doesn't add anything. Glimmer721  talk  01:42, 22 October 2011 (UTC)


 * Critical reception
 * "However, he thought that the episode was too long and could have been told in half and hour". Is that what he really said?
 * He said "feels as if it could be over and done with in half an hour" because it lacked the usual ideas and storylines. Now that I look at it that way, I suppose it's different than I originally thought. I changed it to "lacked ideas and storylines usually found in the show" and left out the half an hour thing. Glimmer721  talk  01:42, 22 October 2011 (UTC)


 * References
 * Seems to be a problem with ref #20.
 * I don't know why; it was working just yesterday. It seems there is a problem with the website, not the link (possible maintnence or server issue). I'd say either wait a few days to see if the problem is fixed, or I could find another source (this is pretty much the only other thing), but I would perfer the first option, as that is the original and offical source. Glimmer721  talk  01:42, 22 October 2011 (UTC)
 * It's probably just a maintenance issue, as you say. I'm happy that this article meets the GA criteria, so we can close this review. Malleus Fatuorum 01:49, 22 October 2011 (UTC)