Talk:Ana Victoria Jiménez

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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 7 January 2019 and 27 April 2019. Further details are available on the course page. Peer reviewers: JuliannaDeLucia.

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I like the structure of you essay. You have a lot of good analysis on the artist and her message. I really like the table to contents at the beginning.

Suggestions:

“The woman of this narrative is beaten by her husband and her children are taken, resulting in her becoming crazy.[3]” In this sentence, I am confused if you are referring to Jimenez or other women.

“Jiménez began to create still photography in 1978, when she began to work with Cine Mujer, a collective which was founded by Rosa Martha Fernandez and Beatriz Mar.[2]” The words begin appears twice in this sentence, I would replace one of them with a synonym.

“She is best known for her archive, Archivo Ana Victoria Jimenez, which contains photographs, posters, and flyers that demonstrated or related to women activism in Mexico.” I think this sentence needs to be more specific in your intro paragraph about what kind of women’s activism she was doing through her art.

Some of the sentences are using passive voice, I recommend looking up some articles/ or video tutorials using active voice.

The archive section uses the word “theme” a lot, look up some synonyms.

Sometimes you switch from present to past tense, make sure you stick to one tense.

I think you need to describe what her art looks like in more depth. After reading your article I do not have a clear image of what her art looks like.

Questions:

Is this artist still alive?

Peer Review
I like the structure of you essay. You have a lot of good analysis on the artist and her message. I really like the table to contents at the beginning.

Suggestions:

“The woman of this narrative is beaten by her husband and her children are taken, resulting in her becoming crazy.[3]” In this sentence, I am confused if you are referring to Jimenez or other women.

“Jiménez began to create still photography in 1978, when she began to work with Cine Mujer, a collective which was founded by Rosa Martha Fernandez and Beatriz Mar.[2]” The words begin appears twice in this sentence, I would replace one of them with a synonym.

“She is best known for her archive, Archivo Ana Victoria Jimenez, which contains photographs, posters, and flyers that demonstrated or related to women activism in Mexico.” I think this sentence needs to be more specific in your intro paragraph about what kind of women’s activism she was doing through her art.

Some of the sentences are using passive voice, I recommend looking up some articles/ or video tutorials using active voice.

The archive section uses the word “theme” a lot, look up some synonyms.

Sometimes you switch from present to past tense, make sure you stick to one tense.

I think you need to describe what her art looks like in more depth. After reading your article I do not have a clear image of what her art looks like.

Questions:

Is this artist still alive? — Preceding unsigned comment added by JuliannaDeLucia (talk • contribs) 23:54, 19 February 2019 (UTC)