Talk:Ancient Jewish art

To do
I have started reviewing this new page. It is obviously notable and a work-in-progress so here's some details which seem to need further attention:


 * 1) The source "ANCIENT JEWISH ART AND ARCHAEOLOGY IN THE DIASPORA" is used repeatedly with different page references.  This needs expanding to detail exactly which author and work this is and citing with Harvard referencing or the like to indicate the particular pages.
 * 2) The lead needs an initial paragraph to introduce and define the topic.

Andrew🐉(talk) 10:16, 9 February 2024 (UTC)


 * Thank you very much, I'll deal with it once I free up. Regarding the lead I believe you're right, I will work on it once I'm free. Thank you :). Homerethegreat (talk) 10:57, 9 February 2024 (UTC)
 * Added author name (Rachel Hachlili). :) Homerethegreat (talk) 11:01, 9 February 2024 (UTC)
 * I've done a lead paragraph, feel free to critic :). Homerethegreat (talk) 19:29, 14 February 2024 (UTC)

CLOP tag
The article contains significant close paraphrasing, especially from Hachlili 1998. An example below:

This is only representative; most sections contain similar levels of close paraphrasing. &#126;~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 00:44, 5 April 2024 (UTC)

Taking on the rewriting of problematic passages
Hello All,

In response to the issues raised by AirshipJungleman29, I thought I would try my hand at improving the article and rewriting the passages which are too closely paraphrased... I hope nobody minds... Uppagus (talk) 11:08, 2 May 2024 (UTC)

On recent developments
Uppagus I saw you've worked quite a lot on the article. I must say I think you did a great job. However, though I imagine it was by mistake you removed sfn, perhaps you did not notice but in the source code you can see there are sources attributed. Overall great work, I hope my comment did not discourage you and you take it as kindly advise. I must say the article looks completely different now and I'll try and find time later to further review your work. Meanwhile it looks like you improved the article very much. So well done! Homerethegreat (talk) 21:45, 17 May 2024 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your very kind words. Truth be told, I didn't know the meaning of sfn... I'm still learning the ins and outs, so thank you for your comment as well... Uppagus (talk) 06:30, 21 May 2024 (UTC)
 * No problem at all! May fair winds lift your sails :) and continue to enjoy editing :). Homerethegreat (talk) 21:49, 16 June 2024 (UTC)