Talk:Andrei Pervozvanny-class battleship/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 09:32, 22 June 2019 (UTC)

This article is in good shape. I have a few comments: More to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:08, 22 June 2019 (UTC) More to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:38, 22 June 2019 (UTC) That's me done. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:28, 23 June 2019 (UTC)
 * suggest hyphenating predreadnought
 * strictly speaking the 1900s is 1900 to 1909, so "built in the first decade of the 1900s" doesn't work. Suggest "built in the first decade of the twentieth century" or "built in the 1900s"
 * link change orders in the lead
 * "to modernize the sister ships"
 * I think the outcome of the March 16, 1917, mutiny needs to be included in the lead.
 * "12- and 8-inch guns in twin-gun turrets" is an odd way to describe armament. Could you break it down more?
 * "two of the Borodino-class ships"
 * "by the designers will would add"
 * "work i on Imperator Pavel I commenced"
 * "engines for the two sister ships" and maybe put the link here
 * "120-millimetre (4.7 in) guns on 30 May"
 * link Battle of Tsushima
 * suggest dropping the decimal place from 80.0 ft in the infobox, also the conversions of the beam don't match
 * the draught measurements don't match
 * perhaps put the deep load displacement range in the infobox
 * the crew numbers also don't match (out by one)
 * are we using the sea trial speed in the infobox, in which case it needs tweaking
 * "had a range of 22,000 yards"
 * perhaps specify the TTs were on the broadside if that is accurate?
 * Two underwater 450 mm torpedo tubes were mounted, one on each side, Isn't that what this amounts to?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:59, 24 June 2019 (UTC)
 * I'm not seeing the main gun turret armor range in the infobox reflected in the body
 * where does the lower range of the casemates in the infobox come from?
 * why italics for "four 3-inch Lender anti-aircraft guns"
 * "ha ve d already been organized"
 * was Helsinki still Helsingfors at this stage?
 * Uncertain, but that's the name that McLaughlin uses.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:59, 24 June 2019 (UTC)
 * to avoid the combination of April and 520, I suggest ";520 sailors of Imperator Pavel I were carrying Bolshevik party cards by the end of April."
 * suggest "On June 13–15, together with the dreadnought Petropavlovsk, the ship bombarded Fort Krasnaya Gorka, whose garrison had mutinied against the Bolsheviks."
 * the licence for File:Pervozvanny class diagrams Brasseys 1912.jpg needs work, no author, so a post70+ tag won't work. Seems to me that PD-UK and PD-1996 would work in combination?
 * I don't think the tags on File:Andrey Pervozvanny hull.jpg are ok, according to the page, it was first published in 2003?
 * Same for File:Evolution of Andrey Pervozvanny 1903-1904-1908.jpg first published in 1996?
 * I dunno, these are obviously archival images, or were redrawn from archived drawings, of the Imperial Russian Navy, which didn't exist after 1917, and since the USSR was not the legal successor of the Russian Empire, I'm inclined to think that they're subject to the copyright law of the Russian Empire for unpublished documents, whatever that was. But since that's nowhere specified, I've dropped them for now.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:59, 24 June 2019 (UTC)
 * the other images are fine.
 * See if my changes are suitable responses for your thorough review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:59, 24 June 2019 (UTC)
 * Yep, all good. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by an appropriately licensed image with an appropriate caption. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:09, 25 June 2019 (UTC)