Talk:Andrew Carnegie Mansion/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Bruxton (talk · contribs) 04:57, 2 February 2024 (UTC)

Review
I came across the article in DYK and I enjoyed it so I want to review. I think we can accomplish the review in the coming days.

Spelling and grammar

 * First story section, cloak room should be one word.
 * Done. Epicgenius (talk) 15:20, 2 February 2024 (UTC)
 * First story section, did you mean to say "decorated? "When Carnegie was alive, both rooms were dedicated with awards"
 * Maybe (though awards are not usually displayed for decorative purposes). I've changed this to "both rooms displayed awards". Epicgenius (talk) 15:20, 2 February 2024 (UTC)
 * Third and fourth stories section, "there were also a guest bedroom" -should it be "was"?
 * This is part of a longer sentence ("There were also a guest bedroom, a trunk room, multiple bathrooms, and bedrooms for guests' servants"), which makes the use of the word "were" correct in context. In essence, this sentence boils down to "There were also several other rooms [and these rooms were a guest bedroom, a trunk room, multiple bathrooms, and bedrooms for guests' servants]." Epicgenius (talk) 15:20, 2 February 2024 (UTC)
 * Development section, "Real-estate agent Lawrence B. Elliman" the hyphen appears correct when used this way
 * 1980s and 1990s section, "she had resided for 11 months, then donated $2 million to the museum." Should it read "months, and then"?
 * I have done that. Epicgenius (talk) 15:20, 2 February 2024 (UTC)
 * 1980s and 1990s section, "The work also involved the rearrangement of study areas and storage rooms" should it read "work also involved rearrangement"
 * Perhaps, but I think either way is fine. Epicgenius (talk) 15:20, 2 February 2024 (UTC)
 * Reception section "Frick mansions as "largest and most picturesque" should it read "the" largest?
 * Yes. I've done that. Epicgenius (talk) 15:20, 2 February 2024 (UTC)
 * Reception section "Carnegie had bought the surrounding lots and resell them only to people who would build similar mansions," should it be "resold"?
 * Done as well. Epicgenius (talk) 15:20, 2 February 2024 (UTC)
 * Effects on development section "also built their mansions on the northern section of Fifth Avenue after Carnegie's house was complete." Should it be "completed"?
 * Done as well. Epicgenius (talk) 15:20, 2 February 2024 (UTC)

Lead
These might be my own failings but I include them here for explanation
 * "it served as the family's residence for nearly half a century" - I have trouble finding the information in the body.
 * The body says from 1902 to 1946 (when Louise Carnegie died), which come to think of it is only 44 years. I specified the year. Epicgenius (talk) 20:13, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
 * "then-remote corner of the Upper East Side" I do not see that remote has been cited in the body
 * The body says "and one source had called the area "only one remove from goatville"", but I can see why the connection to remoteness is not immediately obvious. I've removed "remote". Epicgenius (talk) 20:13, 3 February 2024 (UTC)

Images

 * There are ten images in the article and all relevant to the topic and they appear to have the correct licenses.

General comments

 * Quite an undertaking, 332 references and just short of 10k words. Very minor things to consider above, and then we can move this article to GA. Thank you for your work! I loved the article! Bruxton (talk) 19:59, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review . I have now fixed these issues. Epicgenius (talk) 20:13, 3 February 2024 (UTC)