Talk:Andrianampoinimerina/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 19:23, 26 June 2015 (UTC)

Hello, I'm Calvin999 and I am reviewing this article.


 * Review
 * Could you not include a pronunciation guide of how to say Andrianampoinimerina after his name is mentioned at the start, like Beyoncé does after her name?
 * Added


 * How come children and spouse aren't included in the info box?
 * The exact number of wives is uncertain (it was definitely more than the commonly reported 12), and there are an uncounted number of legitimate and illegitimate children.


 * one of four continually warring principalities that emerged upon the division of the historically unified Imerina kingdom by King Andriamasinavalona a century before. → Quite long, I was nearly out of breath.
 * Reworded


 * designated a UNESCO → Shouldn't it be 'an' as two vowels shouldn't meet?
 * The U is pronounced like "you", so "a" is used


 * all Imerina, then → all Imerina and then
 * Done


 * He died after reigning for 23 years, during which time he successfully reunited → Having reigned for 23 years at the time of his death, he had successfully reunited
 * Done


 * Andrianampoinimerina had begun, and over the next two decades largely achieved Andrianampoinimerina's vision. → Repetition of Andrianampoinimerina
 * changed to "his father's vision"


 * The location of his birth in the Birth sub-section is different to that listed in the info box
 * Fixed


 * Ramboasalamarazaka was born during a period → Who is this?
 * Clarified


 * Ambohimanga remains among the most important spiritual and cultural sites in Madagascar, and was recognized as Madagascar's only cultural UNESCO World Heritage Site in 2001.[23] → Chronologically, I don't think this is best suited here. I think it would be better placed in Legacy.
 * Moved to legacy section


 * Regarded as a "self-made man" who did not rely on his privileges as a prince, his independence, temperament, tenacity and sense of justice made him popular among the commoners and the slaves of Ambohimanga. → As you've used a quote, a citation should be provided really.
 * Removed the quotes - this was not literally quoted from a source (I used the quotes inappropriately to indicate a colloquialism)


 * The later half of Andrianampoinimerina's reign → The latter half of Andrianampoinimerina's reign
 * Changed


 * I'd make Death and succession section just one paragraph. I don't see the point of having two of them being single sentences.
 * Done


 * Same for the last sentence of Legacy, just tack it on to the end of the last paragraph.
 * Done

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
 * I've responded to all of your points above. Please let me know if you'd like to see any further changes. Many thanks for taking the time to review this. - Lemurbaby (talk) 03:40, 8 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Summary


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Well written article. On hold for 7 days. — Calvin999 16:51, 6 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Outcome


 * Pass or Fail:  — Calvin999  08:04, 8 July 2015 (UTC)