Talk:Anemia in pregnancy

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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 30 August 2021 and 21 September 2021. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Wojcickij, Kkiranjk97, Nanihehe, Chnava.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 17:17, 17 January 2022 (UTC)

Peer Review
Really excellent work here. This is well done and is rooted in many of the clinical concepts we have learned thus far. The portion on the Diagnosis section was well organized.I like how you separated the diagnosis into groups based on MCV. One suggested improvement there would be to define MCV a bit more carefully. Also, the cutoffs might need to be sourced and cited(I'd imagine that they aren't necessarily hard cutoffs).

The introductions were well done. The summary of the article at the beginning was well organized, going from the definition of anemia to the clinical manifestations in pregnancy. The organization was also good, but I would suggest moving the diagnosis to an ealier section - it makes more sense to talk about outcomes after diagnosis and clinical course. The content very sound and applicable, the only thing would be to add more links to the terms. For example, "dilutional anemia", "blood plasma", "hemolysis" are terms that are very familiar to us but might not be to those from non-medical backgrounds. Otherwise also make sure that every factual statement you make is supported with a reference, a lot of the clinical diagnostication seemed unsourced.

Peer Review #2
Great work, very thorough!

I think the biggest note I have is that there is a lot of room to link to other wikipedia articles, such as "hemoglobin", "headache", "lethargy", "tachycardia", "tachypnea", "paresthesia", "glositis", "cheilitis", "congestive heart failure", "placenta previa", "abruptio placenta", "sickle cell anemia", "thalassemia", "iron deficiency anemia", "hemoglobinopathies", "Chron's disease", "gastrectomies", "hereditary spherocytosis", "autoimmune hemolytic anemia", "Hypothyroidism", "chronic kidney disease", "hookworm", "plasmodium", "transfusion", "hysterectomy", "intrauterine growth restriction", "preterm delivery", "hematocrit", "erythrocyte", "reticulocyte count", "peripheral smear", "morphology", "serum iron", "total iron binding capacity", "transferrin saturation", "ferritin", "microcytic anemia", "normocytic anemia", "macrocytic anemia", "myelodysplastic syndromes", "nausea", "diarrhea", "constipation", "intravenous", "etiology", "postpartum hemorrhage", "WHO"

I don't think the above list captures all of the opportunities, but those stood out to me at first glance.

Check following sentences for grammatical errors and such: “Iron deficiency anemia: this can occur from the increased production of red blood cells, which requires a lot of iron and also from inadequate intake of iron, which increase in pregnancy.” "This is the most common form of non-physiologic for of iron deficiency anemia"

I know we also discussed gendered language in class and the discussion that was left in another article's talk page, but I think it's worth trying to expand the effort to make Wikipedia a more inclusive source. So I would consider trying to change gendered language like "women" to "people who are pregnant" or "pregnant individuals", for example, and see what happens. AKtheMedStudent (talk) 06:56, 17 September 2021 (UTC)