Talk:Angel Gomes/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: JC Kotisow (talk · contribs) 05:31, 11 July 2023 (UTC)

@User:AideDésintéressée I am very happy to review this article about a Portuguese footballer. This review may take longer than a week due to commitments I am currently or will do in the near future. I have already completed one part of the review so far (in the next section). I look forward to assessing your article. JC Kotisow talk 6:07, 11 July 2023 (UTC)

First Review
@User:AideDésintéressée From the initial look at the article, I can see that some sections need to be re-done or expanded with needed information and background as well as citations to support some of these claims you have written in the article. While the lead section is written fine in terms of wording and tone, it is unnecessarily lengthy and adds information that does not need to be included; mainly in the second paragraph, I will expand on that sooner. Looking at the other sections, however, you have written all the important information about this footballer's career and early life including accomplishments and statistics and as well as personal interests. I will put more suggestions in the near future but for now feel free to discuss or ask any questions. JC Kotisow talk 6:07, 11 July 2023 (UTC)

Lead Section
Looking at your lead section, I find some unnecessary information such as: I feel this can be more simplified. For example:
 * "He began his career with Manchester United at the age of six and progressed through the club's academy. When he made his first-team debut in May 2017, he became the youngest player to play for Manchester United since Duncan Edwards in 1953, as well as the first player born in the 2000s to appear in the Premier League. He made 10 appearances across four seasons for the Manchester United first-team, before being released at the end of his contract in 2020."
 * "Gomes began his career with Manchester United, making his first-team debut in May 2017, becoming the youngest player to play for the club since in 1953. He spent four seasons with United until his release in 2020.

This can be simplified as well; too long for a sentence and not summarising it efficiently:
 * Original: "He signed for Lille in August 2020 and was immediately loaned out to Boavista for a season. After playing more than 30 matches in Portugal, he returned to the north of France and was included in the squad which won the Trophée des Champions, before making his Ligue 1 debut in August 2021."
 * Example: "He signed for Lille in August 2020 and was immediately loaned out to Boavista for a season. Upon his return to France in 2021, he made his Ligue 1 debut in August, and his Champions League debut in December."

Some parts do not need to be added, such: There are no citations saying that he his versatile, your style of play section should have information on positions he can play and references to support this claim. Though it is an important part of his life, it does not reflect any achievement or milestone he has gone through in his career for it to be added.
 * "A versatile player, he has been deployed as an attacking midfielder, central midfielder and wide midfielder in his career."
 * "He is the son of former Portugal under-21 international and professional footballer Gil Gomes and his godfather is former Portugal international and Manchester United winger Nani."

Though your lead section needs improving it is still well-written and follows the rules and guidelines for WP:TECHNICAL. Feel free to ask any questions or discussion if you feel that you disagree with what I have said. JC Kotisow (talk) 06:49, 11 July 2023 (UTC)


 * Hi! Many thanks for taking over and starting the review. I've read your comments and I agree with most of them. I'll do some edits tonight and tomorrow morning to restructure the lead in order to make it shorter and concise. Regarding his career achievements, I'd prefer to keep the Trophée des Champions detail because it's his first major club trophy as a professional. Otherwise, I will expand the style of play section to keep his positions description as you suggested.
 * Thanks again and I look forward to reading your next remarks! AideDésintéressée (talk) 18:02, 13 July 2023 (UTC)

Club career
@AideDésintéressée Apologies for taking so long to respond, I was held up with work over the week but I had the chance to look at this and its so far looking good. I listed some suggestions after looking at your club career although it seems to be minimal problems so far.

I feel this can be worded much better; your writing of the year and his age seems a bit off as well as the stack of citations which I feel can be added towards the end of the sentence:
 * Original: "Gomes started training with the Manchester United youth system at the age of six, in 2006. When he was 13, he represented the under-17s at a tournament in Slovakia in October 2013, and during the 2014–15 season, aged just 14, he was twice named on the bench for the under-18s before making his debut as a substitute against Middlesbrough in their final league match. In July 2015, Gomes captained the Manchester United under-15s at the Manchester United Premier Cup and was named Most Valuable Player, despite his team finishing in 12th place."


 * Example: In 2006, Gomes started playing for Manchester United in their youth system, representing the club over multiple age groups, playing in their U17 and U18 youth sides by the time he was 14. In addition to this, he was named captain for the U15 and named MVP despite the youth side falling 12th at the end of the season.

Note: Be sure to summarise; if you choose not to follow my example then at least summarise it, some information do not need to be added as he is just a youth so tournaments he played in don't matter as much besides his accomplishments (personal awards) at youth level.

This can be worded better, and adding who he scored the hat-trick against could be useful too. Also, add 'at the age of' before saying his age:
 * Original: "Gomes signed as an academy scholar ahead of the 2016–17 season, and on 27 August 2016, he became the youngest player to score a hat-trick for Manchester United at academy level since 2001, despite starting the game on the bench. He also became the third youngest player to achieve the feat in the club's history at 15 years, 362 days."


 * Example: "On 27 August 2016, Gomes signed as an academy scholar prior to the 2016–17 season where he scored a hat-trick in a match against [team he scored against] on [date], becoming the third youngest academy player to score a hat-trick in the club's history at the age of 15 years and 362 days."


 * Original: "After sustaining an injury in April 2017, Gomes was forced to miss the Dallas Cup. With 12 goals in 19 starts he was the under-18s' top scorer that season, and in May 2017 he was voted as the Jimmy Murphy Player of the Year, the youngest player ever to receive the award. The following day, he trained with the first team ahead of possible inclusion in the squad for the final Premier League game of the season."


 * Example: "Gomes soon sustained an injury in April 2017 towards the conclusion of the season. Despite this, he finished as the club's top goalscorer and was named Jimmy Murphy Player of the Year as the youngest recipient for the award. His form led him to train with the first-team ahead of the final game in the 2016–17 season of the Premier League."

Note: This is just rewording so it gives a smoother reading for viewers alike. When writing biographies, think of it like you rewriting this person history or retelling it instead of stating information sentence after sentence (if you know what I'm saying). Sometimes it helps you know.

Final Note: Overall, I really like your club career section, the subheadings in the man united section could use dates besides "early career" and the way you set out your headings and writing seem to be very organised. Certainly had fun reading through it, so no problems. Anyway, if you have any questions or discussions you wish to talk about be free to be open about it. Also forgot to mention about Lead section, it is looking good by the way so no problems there as well. Cheers, JC Kotisow (talk) 10:27, 23 July 2023 (UTC)


 * Hi! Glad to hear from you and thanks for the advice and your compliments! After reading your remarks, I have summarized and shortened the different sentences that were problematic and find it good now. I've also added dates in the subheadings and changed his number because he took No. 8 during this preseason. Can't wait to read you again and to complete this review! Warm regards, AideDésintéressée (talk) 06:31, 30 July 2023 (UTC)

Final Review
@AideDésintéressée Hello, this is my final review for your article and I am proud to say that it passes GA status. Looking through it, I see there are no problems and the way it has been written and structured remains consistent and on topic. Congratulations on your hard work, Cheers, JC Kotisow (talk) 04:31, 3 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Hello! I've just seen the notification. Many thanks for taking charge of this review, your various advice and corrections. See you maybe on other articles. Thanks again for taking time and all the best to you. AideDésintéressée (talk) 04:53, 3 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "your article"? very disrespectful. Stuart1234 (talk) 13:30, 3 August 2023 (UTC)