Talk:Angel Heart/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 20:40, 4 April 2016 (UTC)

Ok I will take a look, make straightforward copyedits as I go and jot queries below. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 20:40, 4 April 2016 (UTC)


 *  As he wrote the script, Parker made several changes from the novel Falling Angel. - you've already mentioned the novel name so it is unnecessary here.


 *  He titled his script Angel Heart, as he wanted "to give the film an identity of its own, separate from its literary beginnings" - can be rewritten to not use a direct quote. Direct quote marks are often jarring to read, so using them only in places where they are really distinctive and add something is prudent....
 * The "identity of its own" sounds schmoozy like from an advertising brochure...but I can't think of an alternative so not a deal-breaker at this point....


 * ' 'Parker sought to make Harry Angel a "sympathetic" character.'' - sounds odd, also be good to de-quote. You mean it to be "Parker sought to make Harry Angel a character that evokes sympathy." (?)


 *  it took extensive convincing for him to actually commit to the role - any elaboration from source here would be good...


 * to "defuse the tension" of the scene - can be rewritten to not use a direct quote.
 * What I meant was to change the wording as well to distance from source paraphrasing-wise, so maybe something like, "to make the actors more comfortable while shooting" or something like it.

Thanks for reviewing the article, Casliber. I have gone through the article and made the changes you brought up thus far, including De Niro's commitment to the role. FrankRizzo (talk) 21:41, 4 April 2016 (UTC)
 * The De Niro stuff is really cool - any color like this is great - anything about (for instance) casting..any other alternate actors..etc.
 * Thanks for your replies. I've taken your comments into consideration.


 * I've expanded on details involving the casting.
 * I've changed to "defuse the tension" of the scene to your suggestion of "to make the actors more comfortable while shooting".
 * I've also removed the "identity of its own" comment in the Writing column. "Parker made several changes from the novel, and titled his script Angel Heart." If possible, I could change this to "Parker titled his script Angel Heart as he wanted to distance his film adaptation from the source material." FrankRizzo (talk) 16:07, 5 April 2016 (UTC)

Casliber, are you still reviewing the article? FrankRizzo (talk) 05:16, 9 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Whoops, sorry, yes I like your suggestion above to change to "Parker titled his script Angel Heart as he wanted to distance his film adaptation from the source material."  Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 07:06, 9 April 2016 (UTC)

Thank you very much, Casliber, for reviewing and passing the article! FrankRizzo (talk) 15:21, 9 April 2016 (UTC)

1. Well written?:
 * Prose quality: - just waiting on last tweak above.  all good
 * Manual of Style compliance:

2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:
 * References to sources: (NB: fals positive with earwig's copyvio detector due to quotes - clear)
 * Citations to reliable sources, where required:
 * No original research:

3. Broad in coverage?:
 * Major aspects:
 * Focused:

4. Reflects a neutral point of view?:
 * Fair representation without bias:

5. Reasonably stable?
 * No edit wars, etc. (Vandalism does not count against GA):

6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:
 * Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales: (on FU image of film poster)
 * Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

Overall:
 * Pass or Fail: - just final couple of things - looking good otherwise. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 08:09, 5 April 2016 (UTC) all good. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 07:06, 9 April 2016 (UTC)