Talk:Angels in Neon Genesis Evangelion/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 18:50, 11 November 2022 (UTC)

I had no idea this article was nominated. I'll be reviewing it.Tintor2 (talk) 18:50, 11 November 2022 (UTC)

Well, it's kinda big article so let's go through each section:


 * Lead
 * References are unneeded in this section. It could be trimmed a bit.
 * I kept anyway the ones on religious symbolism, given the controversy in the fandom and outside.


 * Conception
 * This is the first time in main body that the series and staff members are mentioned. Needs wikilinks.
 * Done


 * The "several artists" mentioned could be move to their individual section and leave a generalization.
 * Done


 * Characteristics
 * "which seems to be their main source of energy and weakness." if it's unconfirmed I suggest removing it.
 * I think it's canonical, so I rewrote this.


 * "To verify the nature of an Angel, Nerv analyzes a wave diagram of unidentified objects, which is indicated by the expression "Blood Type: Blue"" Is this important? I think only Kaworu counts as this unless the Rebuild version of Shinji might count.
 * I would prefer to keep it, since it is also mentioned in Themes.


 * Adam.
 * Fictional dates might come across as fancruft especially when being that specific.
 * Done.


 * The commentary from Christian religion doesn't seem to add anything about the creatures.
 * Horn does not explicitly clarify this point, but the question about Angels coming from Adam Kadmon clearly seems to me to be an allusion to this. But I have quoted his words sic est, so as not to fall into the OR.


 * Lilith
 * I would avoid giving such a big description unless the designs happens to be important for the story.
 * Done.


 * Sachiel
 * The free image details his appearance well so I would trim the prose. I would trim the plot a bit since the character lasted only two episodes. Maybe mention any Rebuild version?
 * Done.

That's all for today. Keep up the good work.Tintor2 (talk) 22:34, 11 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Tried my best. I am missing one or two points, but if you want you can continue the review.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 12:43, 12 November 2022 (UTC)


 * Shamshel
 * "appears three weeks after Sachiel's attack" Another case of specific date.
 * Israfel
 * This character appears in only one episode (well more if we count the manga) so the plot could be trimmed a bit.


 * Rest of the other angel
 * Basically the same since they tend to last one episode.
 * Tabris doesn't seem to have a link to Kaworu's article.
 * The Third and Seventh Angels from Rebuild could easily be moved to the character list.

The reception and the other section seem well enough. Good work.Tintor2 (talk) 13:35, 12 November 2022 (UTC)
 * I'm still here. Give me just few hours and I'll fix everything.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 13:47, 18 November 2022 (UTC)

No problem.Tintor2 (talk) 19:09, 18 November 2022 (UTC)
 * I have avoided moving the Angels of the Rebuild because they do not correspond exactly to those in the series. Tried my best with the rest.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 10:13, 22 November 2022 (UTC)

Passing the review. Good work.Tintor2 (talk) 10:24, 22 November 2022 (UTC)