Talk:Angry Birds (video game)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: RJaguar3 &#124; u  &#124;  t  17:14, 23 March 2011 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Grammar
As an addendum, I should point out that there are several extraneous commas between parts of a compound predicate, like in the sentence I quote below. Also, while this is not required for a GA, I would suggest rewriting several of the sentences that currently use passive voice into more concise sentences that use active verbs. For example, "Players may re-attempt levels as many times as they wish, and may also replay completed levels in an attempt to improve their score at the end of the game." could become "Players may retry or replay levels as often as they wish to attempt to improve their final score." RJaguar3 &#124; u  &#124;  t  18:02, 23 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your review. With regards to the quotations in the lead, is citing them still necessary even if they appear later in the article, complete with citation? It certainly won't be a problem to add the citation, but I was paying attention (perhaps too much) to WP:LEAD and trying to keep citations out of it, if possible. -- McDoob  AU  93  05:24, 24 March 2011 (UTC)
 * There are no special citation policies for the lead (per WP:LEADCITE, which says that "[t]he verifiability policy advises that material that is challenged or likely to be challenged, and quotations, should be cited"); however, often the statements made in the lead of the article will be common knowledge and therefore not require a citation. RJaguar3 &#124;  u  &#124;  t  01:33, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Yes check.svg Done. Citations added. -- McDoob  AU  93  01:52, 25 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Given the number of reviews the game has received, you should make use of Video game reviews for the reception section.Smallman12q (talk) 14:38, 24 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Yes check.svg Done. Added the template per the suggestion. -- McDoob  AU  93  18:32, 24 March 2011 (UTC)


 * You should have a few sentences describing the style of the characters...for example the "stern" looking birds.Smallman12q (talk) 12:44, 27 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Hmmm ... much of the first paragraph of the "Development" section discusses that it was the picture of the "angry-looking birds" that inspired the game in the first place. I'm going through the article you cited to see what else I can glean from it, including the two notable players it mentions. -- McDoob  AU  93  15:51, 27 March 2011 (UTC)

Angry Birds peace treaty image
I saw that the caption and rationale were changed. However, I'm still not convinced that the image meets WP:NFCC. To help in making a better non-free use rationale, could someone please explain what encyclopedic value the picture has that the text description of the sketch does not already provide? As I see it, the sentence in the article, "The Israeli comedy show Eretz Nehederet (in English: a Wonderful Country), one of the nation's most popular TV programs, satirized recent failed Israeli-Palestinian peace attempts by featuring the Angry Birds in peace negotiations with the pigs", tells me everything that the picture could tell me about the sketch. RJaguar3 &#124; u  &#124;  t  06:09, 29 March 2011 (UTC)


 * I looked back at WP:NFCC and have looked at other discussions regarding exactly how NFCC should be interpreted. While I do agree that part of the first criterion is not met (you are right, the description in the text kinda sums things up rather well), at the same time this section does involve critical commentary of the image subject, specifically in included citations from other published sources, so I believe it has a purpose here (that is, to show how the characters have been appearing in other media, and a relatively notable but non-free image can illustrate that). That said, whether this image goes or stays is not the hill I want to die on, since the image is already in the article for the video clip, and this article links to that one. Your guidance in this review has been very helpful and most appreciated. -- McDoob  AU  93  17:29, 30 March 2011 (UTC)

Source for App Store sales
I was reading the article and I ran across the statement in the lead "...over 12 million copies of the game have been purchased from Apple's App Store." This statistic was unsourced, so I tried to find a source in the article. Later, in the Reception section, there is another sentence: "Since release, the free, limited version of Angry Birds has been downloaded over 11 million times for Apple's iOS, and the full-featured paid version has been downloaded nearly 7 million times as of September 2010." The source provided is [10], which only supports the second point made. Do you know of a source for the Apple sales? RJaguar3 &#124; u  &#124;  t  06:22, 29 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Yes check.svg Done. Footnote #39 contains the statistic for the 12M iOS sales. I went ahead and added the appropriate citation for it. -- McDoob  AU  93  17:20, 30 March 2011 (UTC)

Pass
The article has improved sufficiently so that it now meets the GA criteria. To do this, I did remove the peace treaty image from the article per a contributor's suggestion, and I also made a minor change with a word to watch and a statistic citation that still lingered. If you want to include the peace treaty image, feel free to take it to WP:NFCR. Thanks to the contributors on your work in making this a good article, and congratulations. RJaguar3 &#124; u  &#124;  t  21:15, 31 March 2011 (UTC)