Talk:Animal navigation/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 02:50, 9 January 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to do this review; fascinating topic. I'll start with a close readthrough of the article's text in the next day or two, noting here any initial issues I can't easily resolve myself; then we'll go through the criteria checklist. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 02:50, 9 January 2013 (UTC)

Initial readthrough
This looks solid on first pass. It appears to cover the subject well (I'll do some Googling later to see if there's anything obvious that still should be included), is well-written, and explains various mechanisms concisely and clearly. A few minor points below:


 * I agree with the previous commenter that the subheading "history" would be better titled "study of animal navigation" or "history as a field of study" or something similar. "History" alone implies something more like an evolutionary history of the behavior over millennia. You might also add a word like "early"-- it's clear this section doesn't take into account comparatively recent work, which is mostly discussed later. Done.
 * "how he believed animals " -- is the he Murphy or Darwin? Murphy. Done.
 * "began his classic book " -- "classic" is a small bit of editorial voice; you could provide a source, but it's probably easier just to cut it. Done.
 * "An ingenious experiment " -- another bit of editorial voice, especially given that the only source for "ingenious" is Lockley. I'd suggest just cutting it, but if there are secondary sources praising this experiment, perhaps one of them can be work in here somehow Done.
 * "In a classic experiment," -- this article is quite full of praise for Lockley! These experiments do sound brilliant, but I think the phrasing is still out of place. Done.
 * "not clear how it works" -- "it" doesn't have a clear antecedent here--does it mean pigeon navigation generally or the olfactory component specifically? Done.
 * " prescient On the Origins of Certain Instincts" -- another moment where the praise-adjective could probably be cut. Done.
 * Is whale migration considered an important enough navigation to be worth mentioning in this article? It may also be worth mentioning the effects of noise pollution on echolocation in the human impact section. (see not-very-scientific source here: ) -- Khazar2 (talk) 22:05, 9 January 2013 (UTC) --- Whale largely discounts the effect of sonar on whales, so I'd be inclined not to mention that here. There is plenty in the lit. about whale sonar, but JSTOR reveals little about actual navigation. I suspect that experiments on the brains of wild whales may be a little difficult... the best I found was 'magnetic navigation an attractive possibility'. Suggest we don't worry about it. Chiswick Chap (talk) 23:19, 9 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Makes sense to me. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:06, 10 January 2013 (UTC) OK.


 * "Path integration adds the distance, direction vectors travelled from a start point to estimate current position, and so the path back to the start." should this be "distance and direction vectors travelled"? My brain's having a little difficulty processing this sentence for some reason. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:16, 10 January 2013 (UTC) Done.