Talk:Annika Zeyen/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 15:42, 7 October 2013 (UTC)

I'll review this article sometime today. Wizardman 15:42, 7 October 2013 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found: Article is now on hold, and I will pass it when the issues are fixed. Wizardman 02:00, 9 October 2013 (UTC)
 * "She has also played the national team," played for the
 * ✅ Done Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:02, 9 October 2013 (UTC)
 * "was runner-up at 2010 World Championships" was the runner-up
 * ✅ Done Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:02, 9 October 2013 (UTC)
 * "Zeyen found ASV Bonn." starting off a paragraph like this feel like rather iffy writing. Can it be modified a bit? If nothing else at least changed found to joined.
 * ✅ Done Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:02, 9 October 2013 (UTC)
 * "which contained a number of former teammates and opponents from the University of Illinois." This implies to me that she went to Illinois, which I know is not the case since she went to Alabama. Can this be rewritten to avoid the confusion?
 * ✅ Ooops. Wrong state. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:02, 9 October 2013 (UTC)
 * "where majored in advertising" where she maintained.
 * No, "majored" is correct. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:02, 9 October 2013 (UTC)
 * "Her team at the University Alabama" of Alabama
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:02, 9 October 2013 (UTC)
 * "an game" a game
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:02, 9 October 2013 (UTC)
 * "Academic All American" All-American should be hyphenated.
 * ✅ Done. I still think it's kewl that you can be All-American without being American at all.
 * Do a run-though of the article to double-check the English, just to make sure there were no remaining missing word issues I missed.
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:02, 9 October 2013 (UTC)
 * All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:02, 9 October 2013 (UTC)

Everything looks good, so the article passes. Wizardman 03:55, 10 October 2013 (UTC)