Talk:Antoine Ephrem Cartier/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 13:50, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * "1836–March" space either side.


 * "businessman famous for helping develop" -> "businessman who assisted in the development"


 * "the town of Ludington" is "the town of" necessary?


 * Five out of six sentences start with "Antoine" in the Genealogy section, needs mixing up a bit.


 * "Antoine had six brothers and two sisters.[3] By 1895 only" merge, perhaps "Antoine had six brothers and two sisters,[3] but by 1895 only"


 * "Canada on May" comma after Canada.


 * "in the Maskinongé village church" overlinked.


 * "Canada for Chicago" link Chicago.


 * "across the lake" what lake?


 * "contracted with enough log-needy mill owners to make " log-needy is tabloid speak.


 * "that 50,000,000 linear" 50 million


 * "venture. They succeeded. Word got around" not encyclopedic writing.


 * "home 1860 - 1877" unspaced en-dash.


 * "considerable timerland" timerland?


 * "Some of Cartier's business axioms " Cartier's business axioms included...

now Ludington House, a bed and breakfast." In, not "in", and this isn't referenced.
 * "in 1878, Cartier built a Victorian style home at the northeast corner of Ludington Avenue and Lavinia Street near downtown Ludington. The house is


 * "the Democratic party" link.


 * "Manistee city council for four years" unreferenced.

referred to them other than the book, written by a Cartier....
 * "Cartier family original proverbs" are these really even notable? If these proverbs are notable, I'd like to see evidence that someone else has
 * ✅ = Removed from article


 * Ref 4, en-dash, not spaced hyphen. Where's the rest of the citation info?


 * Ref 7, en-dash in year range.


 * Ref 9, en-dash in page range.


 * Same for refs 13 and 14.


 * " Images of America - Ludington 1830 - 1930. Chicago" en-dash and unspaced en-dash.


 * That's my lot. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 21:09, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for review. I'll get started on resolving the issues tomorrow, after a good night's sleep. Really, I mean it this time. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:23, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
 * All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:19, 7 September 2021 (UTC)


 * The CS1 templates automatically display page ranges with an endash, but sfn does not, so I made a request at Template talk:Sfn GoingBatty (talk) 22:14, 8 September 2021 (UTC)