Talk:Anya (Anastasia)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pamzeis (talk · contribs) 10:24, 20 January 2022 (UTC)

I'll pick this one up. Ping me if I don't leave comments within a week. Will try not to screw this up. Pamzeis (talk) 10:24, 20 January 2022 (UTC)

Prose

 * Anya (born Anastasia Nikolaevna) — using "born" just feels very in-universe to me, like you're referring to a real person. Can this be replaced to be less in-universe?
 * Well technically she was a real person lol, but I understand what you mean. I've removed "born Anastasia Nikolaevna" from the body of the paragraph and incorporated it into the footnote about her name instead.--Changedforbetter (talk) 18:24, 23 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Grand Duchess Anastasia Nikolaevna of Russia, the youngest daughter of Nicholas II, and Anna Anderson — this is kinda ambiguous because it might mean that Anya is based on the youngest daughter of Nicholas, provided the reader likely doesn't know Anastasia is the youngest daughter... if that makes sense
 * Although I understand that "the youngest daughter of Nicholas II" could be interpreted as an entirely different person on whom Anya was based out of context, I do think that's a bit of reach; this phrase is immediately preceded by "the character is loosely based on two historical figures". I will leave it as-is for now.--Changedforbetter (talk) 18:24, 23 January 2022 (UTC)


 * White, the idea that — shouldn't idea be plural?
 * Corrected.--Changedforbetter (talk) 18:57, 23 January 2022 (UTC)


 * specifically the combination of spunkiness and sweetness she brings to her characters — this is more of an opinion, but it's stated as a fact
 * Revised.--Changedforbetter (talk) 18:57, 23 January 2022 (UTC)


 * For mechanical reasons, Ryan recorded most of her dialogue isolated from co-star John Cusack, who voices her character's love interest Dimitri, apart from one occasion on which the actors were allowed to record in neighboring sound booths, which Goldman believes benefited their performances. — there are a lot of ideas jammed into this sentence, making it hard to follow. Can it be split up?
 * Revised.--Changedforbetter (talk) 18:57, 23 January 2022 (UTC)


 * hired was unavailable, initially only hoping to — Callaway or the other singer?
 * Callaway. Sentenced revised to make this clear.--Changedforbetter (talk) 18:57, 23 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Paris, France to recover — comma after France
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:26, 23 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Anya appears in Anastasia on Ice, an — this kinda comes out of nowhere and feels like it's still talking about Anastasia plot
 * Fixed. Created separate sub-headings for the character's film and stage appearances.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:26, 23 January 2022 (UTC)


 * The first paragraph of #Critical reception mostly consists of "X of Y described Anya as Z", making it kinda boring. If you haven't read it already, WP:CRS is a useful essay for this
 * Revised the entire section to comply with guidelines.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:26, 23 January 2022 (UTC)


 * others can't accept it because she wasn't an — informal contractions
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:57, 23 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Disney' streaming → Disney's streaming or Disney streaming
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:57, 23 January 2022 (UTC)


 * in several merchandise based → in much merchandise based or in a large amount of merchandise based
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:57, 23 January 2022 (UTC)


 * puzzles and CD-Rom games — comma after and
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:57, 23 January 2022 (UTC)

Other

 * For File:Anya Anastasia.jpeg, the purpose of use is "To show what the character looks like". I don't really find this sufficient. Why does the reader need to know what she looks like?
 * Revised to "To show readers what the character (the topic of the article) looks like, and how she differs in appearance to the historical figure on whom she is based."--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:46, 25 January 2022 (UTC)

Article. Ping me when all have been resolved. Pamzeis (talk) 04:59, 25 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Pamzeis Hi there, I believe all comments have been addressed. Awaiting response/verdict.--Changedforbetter (talk) 20:51, 25 January 2022 (UTC)

Second look

 * A former animator for Fox's then-rival studio Disney, critics believe — I think there's a grammatical error here, as the first bit is tied to critics, which means that it's saying the critics were a former animator for Disney
 * Fixed. Changed to "Critics believe Bluth, a former animator for Fox's then-rival studio Disney, was inspired by skills"--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:34, 8 February 2022 (UTC)


 * working for them Disney — I feel like there's something wrong her, but I can't quite put my finger on it...
 * Fixed. Rogue "Disney" removed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:34, 8 February 2022 (UTC)


 * Bluth and his co-director Gary — missing comma?
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:34, 8 February 2022 (UTC)


 * from actor John Cusack who — unsure but I think there's a missing comma?
 * Comma added.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:34, 8 February 2022 (UTC)


 * two signature songs "Journey to the Past" and "Once Upon a December" — if there are only two, comma after songs
 * Comma added.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:34, 8 February 2022 (UTC)


 * Anya first appears in the animated film Anastasia (1997). Banished by Nicholas — here we have the inverse of an above comment: it first talks about her first appearance and then in the next sentence, it talks about the plot. And I got a bit confused...
 * Fixed. I just removed the "Anya first appears in the animated film" part.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:34, 8 February 2022 (UTC)


 * praised by critics for making Anya a charming and likable — WP:VOICE
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:34, 8 February 2022 (UTC)


 * voice acting for lacking charm — ditto
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:34, 8 February 2022 (UTC)


 * Fox for disrespecting Anastasia — ditto ditto
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:35, 8 February 2022 (UTC)

I think that's it, in addition to a comment about the sourcing above. Pamzeis (talk) 11:54, 6 February 2022 (UTC)
 * Pamzeis thank you for your comments. I have once again addressed all concerns. --Changedforbetter (talk) 05:43, 8 February 2022 (UTC)

Third look
I think that's everything! A from me! Pamzeis (talk) 05:40, 13 February 2022 (UTC)

Disney Princess membership
Let’s be honest, she deserves it! — Preceding unsigned comment added by KieranCallahan72 (talk • contribs) 20:47, 7 December 2022 (UTC)
 * She may indeed, but it's not up to us to decide. The Disney Princess navbox does not belong on this page. Powers T 18:55, 20 December 2022 (UTC)

Disney needs to add her now! They made merchandise for her so why not? — Preceding unsigned comment added by KieranCallahan72 (talk • contribs) 01:50, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
 * Please do not use an article's talk page as a forum for personal discussions (i.e. WP:NOTFORUM) as discussions in this area should be kept on how to improve the article. Our personal opinions on whether or not Anya should be an official Disney Princess are not relevant to this talk page. Aoba47 (talk) 04:05, 23 December 2022 (UTC)