Talk:Apis andreniformis

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
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Comments on Kin Selection
Hi, thank you for your contribution to Wikipedia! I thought the Kin Selection information was really interesting. However, it was a bit unclear to me. I did not want to change the original content so I added a few sentences below based on what I found through an additional source (which I also cited for you). Feel free to take a look at that source and see if it helps you add even more information to Kin Selection! Brandon.eng (talk) 17:40, 1 October 2015 (UTC)

Edits to the page
Hi, I made a lot of edits to the page in terms of adding new information and blending the previous information with mine. Most of the information was not cited, so I fixed one of them, but for the rest of the facts, I was not sure what information came from where. If anyone knows, by all means fix it. I just didn't want to delete other people information. I added a lot of information ranging from nest structure to human importance.Callisons (talk) 02:28, 28 November 2015 (UTC)

Edits for Class
Hi! I just added a couple of edits in terms of making the page a little more concise and improving some wording of sentences. I also included some links to other Wikipedia pages, which I hope will be helpful to other viewers if they are unfamiliar with some of the more science-specific terminology. I noticed there is no image, so it might be helpful to the viewer to have a visual of the bee when you are describing the physical morphology.

Finally I noticed that there were not any in-line citations in the beginning, so I did a little research to find more of where that general information could have come from. I found a source that basically discusses most of the introduction in the paper, so I linked those as references to the introduction which seemed to be lacking. Hope this was helpful! Sayabery (talk) 03:48, 1 October 2015 (UTC)

Comments on Diction
Hi! I am an undergraduate student at Washington University in St. Louis and currently studying behavioral ecology. I took the liberty to fix a few errors in your article, namely grammatical mistakes, syntax missteps, and ambiguous diction choices. I enjoyed reading your article and thought it to be very informative; however, that being said, I believe a facet of the article that can be improved on is the actual writing. Redundancy in words and faulty punctuation were a priority when I was editing this article. Otherwise, I enjoyed reading and proof-reading your article! AddyShak (talk) 00:15, 2 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi again! I decided to revisit your article to see if any changes were made. I also additionally noticed that your reference section is a little awry and needs to be fixed. The numbering ceases halfway in the list, and therefore there is an issue with coinciding in-line citations, as it is not included. I think that should be your utmost priority as of now. Moreover, I think adding a picture/finding a picture would be great as to help the reader better visualize the the bee. Thanks and I hope this was helpful!AddyShak (talk) 20:09, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Peer Review
I added internal links and edited grammar and wording throughout the article. Can you beef up the taxonomy section? It is not very informative and does not go into much detail. Some pictures would also be really helpful. In addition, you talk about the sister species a lot so it gets very repetitive very quickly. Is there any way that you could cut down on it and mention it in less sections?

The information that you have is good overall, but some better wording would make this article shine. Xerylium (talk) 03:31, 5 December 2015 (UTC)