Talk:Applause (Lady Gaga song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MaranoFan (talk · contribs) 09:02, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this article. --MaranoFan (talk) 09:02, 30 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks, once you are done with full review then I will address it. — I B  [ Poke  ] 09:57, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

Lede
--MaranoFan (talk) 09:31, 30 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "released as the album's lead single by Interscope Records" > "released as the album's lead single through Interscope Records"
 * ""Applause" achieved worldwide commercial success in a variety of major music markets." >""Applause" achieved commercial success in a variety of major music markets.""
 * "Gaga's twelfth top-ten (and ninth top-five) single when it peaked at number four on the Billboard Hot 100." > "It peaked at number four on the US Billboard Hot 100, becoming Gaga's ninth top-five single."
 * "sold over 2,580,000 copies, as of April 2015" > "went on to sell over 2,580,000 copies in the US."
 * "certified three-times platinum" > "certified triple platinum"
 * "fashion photographer duo Inez and Vinoodh" > "fashion photography duo Inez and Vinoodh"
 * "jumbo-screens"> Shouldn't this be "jumbotrons"?
 * "profile of the artist herself"> "profile of Gaga herself"
 * "dissected her career"> Try something like "represented"
 * "Many other notable live performances followed, including ones on Good Morning America and Saturday Night Live, as well as during Gaga's residency show at Roseland Ballroom and on the ArtRave: The Artpop Ball."> "Applause was promoted with multiple more performances, including ones on Good Morning America and Saturday Night Live, as well as during Gaga's residency show at Roseland Ballroom and on ArtRave: The Artpop Ball."

Background and writing
--MaranoFan (talk) 13:26, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "the album's concepts were "beginning to flourish""> I don't think it needs inverted commas
 * "songs were sketched out"> "songs were written"
 * "she yearned to make"> Try something like "intended" or "wished"
 * "a revelation that instead was announced one month in advance"> There is something definitely wrong with this sentence. Try something like "which was instead announced on" or "which was instead revealed on".
 * " forced the singer into a six-month hiatus"> "caused the singer to take a six-month hiatus".
 * Add a source after "creative gifts"
 * The quote is pretty big. Can you please try and work some of it into prose?
 * Have to disagree here a bit MF. The quote is essentially ad verbatim and represents what the artist spoke about and felt about the song. I don't think this one violates WP:QUOTEFARM.

Recording and composition
--MaranoFan (talk) 13:35, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 * ""Applause" was recorded at"> "The recording sessions for "Applause" took place at".
 * "mixing was done by Bill Malina"> " mixing was carried out by Bill Malina"
 * "According to the sheet music published at Musicnotes.com, "> This can be removed entirely as it is not subjective.
 * Pretty sure "stuttering synthesisers" should be in quotes. If no source can be found then remove this.
 * "Robbie Daw from" --> "Robbie Daw of"
 * "Michael Cragg of The Guardian" --> "The Guardian's Michael Cragg"

Artwork and release
--MaranoFan (talk) 13:46, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "lead single for Artpop" --> "lead single from Artpop"
 * ""Every record that you played me is better than the one that you played before it, so the last one should be your first single." --> I don't think the removal of this quote will be detrimental to any reader. Just say something like "Iovine expressed preference for ''Applause" over all of the other songs".
 * "On August 10," --> Add the year and remove the word "small"
 * "short clip for "Applause"" --> Replace "for with "of"
 * "who said that" --> "who opined that"
 * "most copies of the single" --> "most copies of "Applause""

Critical reception
--MaranoFan (talk) 13:54, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "The Huffington Post described it as" --> The author for this article seems to be 'Baggers'.
 * "Mof Gimmers from The Quietus" --> "of The Quietus"
 * "Positive comment also came from Mike Driver from" --> "Positive feedback also came from Mike Driver of"
 * "Spin criticized the song's "bland dance-bot foundations"" --> The author for this article seems to be 'Marc Hogan'.

Chart performance
--MaranoFan (talk) 14:05, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "Gaga performing "Applause" on the" --> "Gaga performing "Applause" on"
 * "forecasted "Applause" to sell upwards" --> "predicted "Applause" to sell upwards"
 * "in their first week" --> "in its first week"
 * "did not enter the Billboard's Hot 100 on its first week" --> "in" its first week
 * "impacting radio stations on August 19" --> Add the year
 * "did peak at" --> "did reach"
 * "On its second week on the charts, the song climbed to number four on the Billboard Hot 100" --> But if it didn't chart on the H100, then how had it "climbed" or how was it "its second week on the charts". This needs clarification.
 * "and reached 1 million copies sold" --> "and reached sales of 1 million copies"
 * " on the airplay chart" --> "on that chart"
 * "As of April 2015" --> Remove this.
 * No this is a norm to mention at what date the sales were retrieved, to give perspective how old the sales data is. — I B  [ Poke  ] 10:49, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
 * "3 times platinum" --> "triple platinum"
 * "making it her highest" --> "becoming her highest"
 * "has sold 234,979 copies" --> Change that to "had" or remove it altogether.
 * "15,000 copies, 7,500 copies, and 20,000 copies respectively" --> Thats too much repetition of "copies" in one sentence.

Development

 * "fashion photographer duo" --> "fashion photography duo"
 * "the Paramount Pictures studio lot" --> "at Paramount Pictures studios".
 * "over the course of a three-day period" --> "over the course of three days"
 * "Gaga was heavily inspired" --> Remove "heavily"
 * "Fashion worn in the video included" --> Change fashion to attire
 * Again, a pretty huge quote here. Try to work it into prose.
 * This time I agree :). — I B  [ Poke  ] 10:49, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

Release and synopsis

 * "jumbo-screens" --> "jumbotrons"
 * "The video itself" --> Remove "itself"
 * "the name of her album" --> I think by this time the reader knows that Artpop is her album. Remove this.

Reception and analysis

 * Change all of the "from"s to "of"s. Writer X of Source X" is correct over "Writer X from Source X".
 * No other concerns here.

--MaranoFan (talk) 14:12, 31 March 2016 (UTC)

Live performances
--MaranoFan (talk) 14:45, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "replaced by cheers and applause" --> Use only one of the two verbs.
 * "Gaga next performed "Applause"" --> Lets use "reprised" instead.
 * "where she performed a highly choreographed dance routine" --> What is a highly choreographed dance routine?

In popular culture
This section is fairly short. Merge it with the live performances one or another.--MaranoFan (talk) 14:45, 31 March 2016 (UTC)

Track listings and formats
No issues.--MaranoFan (talk) 14:45, 31 March 2016 (UTC)

Credits and personnel
No issues.--MaranoFan (talk) 14:45, 31 March 2016 (UTC)

No other issues in the article. --MaranoFan (talk) 14:45, 31 March 2016 (UTC)

End of review
If the above concerns are addressed within 7 days, I will pass the article.--MaranoFan (talk) 14:45, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 * all addressed. — I B  [ Poke  ] 10:49, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
 * OK, I made a few tweaks here, but no other concerns. Great job, passing.--MaranoFan (talk) 11:52, 1 April 2016 (UTC)