Talk:Aqil Agha/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cerebellum (talk · contribs) 22:15, 27 November 2015 (UTC)

Hello! I will be reviewing this article. --Cerebellum (talk) 22:15, 27 November 2015 (UTC)

All right, great job on this! Very interesting read. I messed with the prose a little bit, but feel free to revert if you don't like my changes. I am going to pass as a GA, and below I've left you a few comments for further improvement.
 * The lead says "surname sometimes spelled Aga", but I don't think Agha is a surname; it seems to be a title, see Agha (Ottoman Empire), so that sentence should be changed to say "title." Maybe you could link to the page on the title as well.
 * We should include the Arabic version of his name, per WP:UEIA. The Arabic wikipedia doesn't have an article on him so I'm not exactly sure how to spell his name, but I think it is  عقيل آغا الحاسي (based on this).
 * When you talk about the dowry for Aqil's daughter, what is PT?
 * Battle of Hattin section: When you say 'Aqil was reassigned to his powerful post in the region in 1855'', what post do you mean? His post as a commander of irregulars?
 * Seems like something is wrong with the first paragraph of the Battle of Hattin section, it doesn't have a period after Karak and is followed by a bulleted point.
 * I think in the last paragraph, the sentence about being regarded in a positive light by modern-day sources and local tradition should have a reference. --Cerebellum (talk) 18:48, 5 December 2015 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review and the pass. I addressed the issues you listed above, except for the Arabic script, which I've requested from a fellow editor. --Al Ameer (talk) 18:57, 6 December 2015 (UTC)