Talk:Arab migrations to the Maghreb/GA1

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Reviewer: Steelkamp (talk · contribs) 14:10, 7 August 2023 (UTC)

I'll review this. Steelkamp (talk) 14:10, 7 August 2023 (UTC)

Well written

 * Optional: There are a lot of duplicate links which should mostly be removed, particularly for duplicate links within the same paragraph. Duplicate links may be left as is if they are in different sections though. Duplicate links can be easily idenfitied using duplinks-alt.
 * "During the earliest Muslim conquests..." Can you give a timeframe for this in years?
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 12:46, 8 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "7th-8th century." Should this be changed to "7th or 8th century"?
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 12:46, 8 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "The Umayyad Caliphate was aware of the importance of the spread and settlement of Arabs in the Maghreb." Importance to who?
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 13:02, 8 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "anti-Kharijite wars". Is there a Wikipedia page this can link to?
 * There is no page about this unfortunately but I specified who the war was being fought against. Skitash (talk) 12:46, 8 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "Ifriqiya (modern-day Tunisia)". This note could be shifted up to the first mention of Ifriqiya.
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 12:46, 8 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "To weaken resistance by Arab tribes in Ifriqiya, the Almohad ruler Abd al-Mu'min transferred them to Morocco in large numbers and settled them in the Atlantic plains." This sentence could mention the century/decade if that is known. I know it already says the century in the section title but I think it should be written in the paragraph as well.
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 21:29, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "Under the Marinids, the Arabs grew in importance in Morocco." Same here. I think the time period should be mentioned.
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 21:29, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "The appearance of the Arabs added to the complexity of the ethnic population of Morocco". I think this can be reworded. It's not exactly clear what it means.
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 21:29, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "The Almohad ruler Abd al-Mu'min". This can be simplified to "Abd al-Mu'min" seeing as he is already introduced earlier in the paragraph.
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 21:29, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "and also dominated the valleys of the Moulouya, Draa, Sous, as well as the Tafilalt oasis region." What is this referring to? Should this sentence be split into two?
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 21:29, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * It doesn't look like that sentence has been changed. Steelkamp (talk) 13:14, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Apologies, I confused it with another sentence. It is fixed now. Skitash (talk) 18:16, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Is Harry Norris a historian? Should this be prefaced by "Historian Harry Norris"?
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 21:29, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "A major effect of the Arab migrations to the Maghreb was the Arabization of its population. In addition to changing the population's demographics, the migration resulted in the Arabization of the native Berber population." Could these sentences be simplified? Aren't these sentences saying the same thing?
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 18:16, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "The Arabization took place around Arab centres". What does this mean? Is this referring to Arab centres in the Maghreb?
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 18:16, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "The migration of Banu Hilal and Banu Sulaym in the 11th century had a much greater influence on the process of Arabization of the population." I suggest changing this to "The migration of Banu Hilal and Banu Sulaym in the 11th century had a much greater influence on the process of Arabization than the migration beforehand."
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 18:16, 10 August 2023 (UTC)

Verifiable with no original research

 * www.globalsecurity.org seems to be an unreliable source as per WP:GLOBALSECURITY and should be replaced.
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 12:57, 8 August 2023 (UTC)
 * For reference 27, is it possible to use a modern day source instead?
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 12:52, 8 August 2023 (UTC)
 * There is a citation needed tag which needs to be fixed before this review is passed.
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 12:52, 8 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "According to al-Ya'qubi, in the mountains near Cyrenaica were the Arab tribes of Azd, Lakhm, Judham, al-Sadaf, and other Yemenite tribes on the eastern mountain, and Ghassan, Judham, Azd, Tujayb and others on the eastern mountain." This sentence should be reworded. It refers to the eastern mountain twice?
 * ✅ It was meant to say western mountain. Skitash (talk) 11:36, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "of the conquerors and their descendants with very few outsiders. Land grants were given to these soldiers, creating a landed Arab aristocracy with extensive landholdings, cultivated in many cases by slaves from". This part should be reworded. It is closely paraphrased from this source.
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 18:16, 10 August 2023 (UTC)

Illustrated, if possible

 * Optional: I suggest adding alt text to the images to aid with accessibility.
 * ✅ Skitash (talk) 12:46, 8 August 2023 (UTC)

General
Looks good enough to me now. Will pass this review. Steelkamp (talk) 09:17, 14 August 2023 (UTC)