Talk:Areíto

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There is so much great information here. Well done on that. As the other reviewer noted, you may want to check for uniform accents throughout.

There are two main things I would focus on. One, finding a way to develop the history section more as applied to the areito, as opposed to the Taino culture. Perhaps there's a way to still talk about the Taino culture, but allow that o lead into a background for the areito. Secondly, the definitions and historical evidence is your most dense section of the article. It might help to break it up with some sub headings. Doing that might also help you focus that section just a bit more.

Joshuachasegold (talk) 21:58, 20 November 2016 (UTC)

Hi there! Here is my feedback and some suggestions about structure in particular. Hope it helps! Lead section provides a clear description about the Areíto. I think it doesn’t exactly mirror your structure of the rest of your article but I have some suggestions for restructuring the subsections rather than changing the lead. Also, I would go through the article to make sure accents in “areíto” and Taíno” are uniform. Could you also provide more source information about the visual interpretation of the Arieto image- it seems like a Spanish colonizers’ take on not the Taino people’s take in particular. – but its also in English so maybe a modern take drawing.

Your “History & Cultural Context” section is actually about Taino people– I thought you were going to speak on the history of the Areito in particular. Perhaps you could clearify that title to something like “History of Taino People.” Within this section your “Cemis & Belief Systems” section could be a subsection of “History of Taino People” instead of its own larger section. Another image suggestion here is to add a map of the region you are describing in the Caribbean.

Your “Definitions of Areito & Historical Evidence” section could be simplified to further encompass “Spanish Evidence” or something like that- “Colonizer Evidence” perhaps. Then after your introductory note about various forms of evidence you could create subsections of each person you cite. In this same section, “Areíto was a Taino word that the Spanish adopted to describe epic poems...” – this makes the first sentence of the article slightly less accurate- “The areíto or areyto was a word used by the Spanish …..” Perhaps include “The areíto or areyto was a (Taino) word used…”

The “Examples of Areito” feels more like a “History of Areito” section or a “Description” or even “The Areito” which is the what your article is all about so, I think it should go directly after the lead instead of at the end of the article.

I would add a few more links to the “See Also” section based on some of your main themes and people & places described in the article perhaps also including a short description of what you would learn about with these extra links.

Prepared by Vivianavrgs (talk) 22:06, 19 November 2016 (UTC)

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