Talk:Argiope aemula

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 15 September 2020 and 17 December 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Shutaro.hayashihara.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 17:31, 17 January 2022 (UTC)

Behavioral Ecology Student Suggestions
HarrisZW777 (talk) 02:01, 29 November 2020 (UTC) In order to help your article reach 'Good Article' status, I went through and made some edits to it. Initially, your description section of the spider did not flow too well so I tried my best to edit that. Aside from that, I think you can add a few more sections to this article to help it be more broad in its coverage. Further, adding more photos would help make the article better illustrated. Overall, I really enjoyed this article. With a few minor additions, I think it is well on its way to reaching Good Article status.

Some Article Suggestions
Overall really great article! I would try and expand on the description section by giving a sentence or so for each major section, you have in the article to better introduce the reader to the spider. I reorganized the article a little. I moved the venom section lower, where it typically goes in a spider article. I also reorganized the behavior section: I moved the sexual cannibalism section to the reproduction/mating section and split the behavior section into a hunting/predation section and a webbing section. --Dgoldblum (talk) 03:13, 1 December 2020 (UTC)

Fellow student article feedback
Good article, Shutaro! I found your spider very interesting, particularly the information about its unique web design and visually striking stabilimentum. I made some grammar and spelling changes, as well as changes to the way certain pieces of information were phrased. In particular, I focused on the “sexual cannibalism” subsection, which felt a little too much like a scientific article, so I revised the phrasing to be more to the style of a Wiki article. It might be a good idea to go through the rest of the article and do the same, making sure the language style reads more like Wiki, with declarative statements, than like a journal article with statements that start "It has been observed..." or "It was found...". Shay bala (talk) 16:48, 14 December 2020 (UTC)